Webnovel Author: NessoftheSNES - Novel Collection

Of course, I can't really talk about story development or characters yet, but nevertheless, the first chapter is really well written, and has very colourful descriptions. It establishes stakes by placing the protagonist at his most powerful and establishing conflict between him and the other sovereigns. The only gripes I have with it, is that maybe the vocabulary used isn't always the most accurate, and the lack or misuse of punctuation marks can make it a bit confusing at times, but these are pretty minor imo. Keep up the good work ^^

Ok, so this is a really well written novel, which is already more than I can say for most novels here. The characters are really compelling, and because of the vibrant descriptions, you can get a very good idea of the world you have been placed in. The only drawback, for me is a bit of bad grammar in the first chapters, but as the novel progresses, it gets fixed. Keep up the good work ^^

The novel is amazing! The writing makes it very easy to lose yourself in the world of the novel, and its characters. The descriptions for every little thing paint a vibrant image of the setting, and the dynamics between characters. The only two criticisms I think im qualified to offer are, first off, the pacing, and second, the character development of the protagonist. The pacing can be slow at times, because of all the descriptions for everything, which are good, on one hand, for reasons i mentioned before, but can drag for a bit long at times. Now the protagonist doesn't seem to have any development. it might be a bit early to say that, as the novel is only 9 chapters, but i felt the need to say it anyway. That's not to say he doesn't have a character, but he certainly isn't experiencing any visible change. These are only minor criticisms though, and don't take out any of the fun in reading the story. It has the perfect mixture of "lighthearted" and "really serious" tone it needs. Keep it up Tоварищ!! (sidenote: i really wanna see Tachibana meet a gruesome end)

thanks man, appreciated. I'll continue the work once i finish my exams, in a couple months. its a long wait, but i got to..

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The writing starts off great, but after just a few chapters, the translation is so bad it becomes incomprehensible. I really liked it at first. The story i not that bad, its actually kind of original, and i guess the characters are not bad either, but how could i read a book or a novel with such bad writing. Just take example from a fantasy classic, such as 'the wizard of earthsea', or 'the hobbit' and try to match its style. The way to learn to write good is to read a lot