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Again, I think you are mixing up Sasaki and Queen, Sasaki is a fishmen, Queen is a cyborg
Blades clashed in a mesmerizing display of skill and technique. The Colosseum became a battlefield of finesse, each movement calculated and precise. Sasaki, with his cybernetic enhancements, proved a formidable adversary. The martial artist, however, danced around his attacks, exploiting any opening with lightning-fast strikes.
Journey to the One Piece
Anime & Comics · thelightedghost
Sasaki ain't a cyborg though...
As Jack exited the arena, Sasaki, the armored cyborg with swords at the ready, stepped in to take his place. His opponent, a swift martial artist known for his precision, eyed him with a confident smirk.
Journey to the One Piece
Anime & Comics · thelightedghost
Tell this to Kishimoto, he is the one who wrote Naruto
"If we can reach him, I'm sure Ken will assist. However, he can't free Ace alone. Trying to do so would result in failure and his death. It would be a futile mission."
Journey to the One Piece
Anime & Comics · thelightedghost
No he can't, Obito has to become tangible to take someone into the Kamui dimension, meaning that if Ken tries to do so, Sengoku would then be able to strike him.
"If we can reach him, I'm sure Ken will assist. However, he can't free Ace alone. Trying to do so would result in failure and his death. It would be a futile mission."
Journey to the One Piece
Anime & Comics · thelightedghost
The writing isn't bad, it's the style you chose that reduces the quality a little (Im' the one who wrote the earlier comment, just answering with another account). I get it that writing multiple stories at the same time makes it difficult for you to write all of them in detail, it's hard for you to write, which can give the impression that you are rushing things and not creating enough build up. Using chat gpt and writing key moments of build up could be a good thing for your book. By the way, it has nothing to do with the subject, but I would like to thank you man, you are the reason I started writing fanfics, your Marvel novel really gave me the courage to start my own fanfics. Although I dropped my first novel because I wasn't happy with what I wrote, the ones that I am preparing right now are way better, so thank you for writing your stories.
ch 247 I am Moses
Journey to the One Piece
Anime & Comics · thelightedghost
I'm afraid I have to disagree with those who are saying that only having OC would dull the story. It is hard to write a fanfic about Overlord because there isn't enough material to write a substantial story about it. If the MC joins Ainz, then there is basically nobody who can oppose them (don't talk about the Dragon Lords, they ain't enough to make a worthwhile opposition), all the strong characters are on one side, so what is the author supposed to write about? MC bullying weaklings? Satisfying but it will get boring very quickly. On the other hand, if the author introduces a new group into the mix, a new power structure will appear, new scenarios can be created, new situations, abilities, and relationship dynamics can appear, and the story will become richer. Plus, I'm interested to see what the MC's organization will look like. What are the members going to be? Will they oppose Nazarick? How will that organization work? What will their personalities be? Sorry but as a writer myself, I just can't see a lot to write about for this fanfic if the MC simply follows Momonga, I personally think that the story would quickly lose steam, the best route this fanfic can take is to expand on the Overlord world and create new dynamics that can make the story interesting and give the MC something to look out for (and I mean real things to look out for, not just catching girls like pokemons).
I respectfully refused. I know that the party will turn out later to become the known guild and one of the strongest Ainz Ooal Gown, but I have no plan to stick with them at that time. I prefer to do my own things and play solo.
Overlord: The Dragon Monarch
Anime & Comics · Nouflex
Honestly, I'm always against the idea of bringing modern technology to foreign worlds, I think it takes away the uniqueness of the said world
"Not right now, but maybe we can do something about it in the future." Ken said. After nearly an hour in the air, the massive city built high above the land appeared on the horizon below them. Indeed, Alubarna was a fascinating city in its own right. It was extremely difficult to conquer the city since it was elevated a few feet off the ground and the only way in was via the meandering staircases that connected its many stories.
Journey to the One Piece
Anime & Comics · thelightedghost
human duck?
When Luffy stared at Caroo with his meat eyes, a broad grin spread across everyone's features. The thought of eating Caroo had already crossed his mind. Ussop inevitably intervened to smack some sense into him. As soon as Caroo had finished his aerial explorations, he landed and resumed his human normal duck shape.
Journey to the One Piece
Anime & Comics · thelightedghost
Just don't make him forget all his character development please, as much as there are lunatics here who want to see him suffer left and right, that would not be logical for him to start from the beginning on that aspect.
ch 76 Chapter 76: (You are not)Welcome to London!
A Soulsborne's Traveler System
Anime & Comics · Bronz_Deck
I still don't understand why Luffy didn't simply smash Crocodile with all his water jutsus... I mean, why spray yourself with water just to punch someone when you can directly spray your enemy?
Crocodile was lying in a small pool of blood where he had lost total unconsciousness. He lied down in the same way he was beaten down in Alubarna in the actual story. Only this time, Luffy didn't have to suffer twice and defeat him while using the flowing blood to act as the source of liquid. Luffy used the ninja techniques to make sure he was supported by water always. Of course, the water surrounding the underground also helped when he came running out.
Journey to the One Piece
Anime & Comics · thelightedghost
This doesn't make sense, he wasn't even in the navy at that time, he and Fujitora got recruited after the two years time skip via the world's military conscription
"Oh! It seems like someone from this small crew knows me. Although you guys are very weak right now, it wouldn't be wise for a marine to ignore the pirates. So, I am going to kill all of you right now."
Vice Captain of the Straw Hat Pirates
Anime & Comics · Evil_Paragon
There is a big problem though, if I remember correctly, Momo needs to understand the atomic configuration of an object in order to reproduce it, so Vivi will basically be limited to what Momo can do since she has her memories too. On that note, she will need to find an intelligent person to use her quirk in the best possible way, if she meets Vegapunk, she will even be able to create devil fruits!
Vivi started creating new things but she did so while she was stuffing herself with meat. Chopper was turning into different animals to see to what extent he could use his powers. Robin was the awkward one here as she didn't know how to use her new stand as she didn't want her comrades to be the scapegoat. But of course some people would always have a death wish.
Journey to the One Piece
Anime & Comics · thelightedghost
Punk Hazard isn't really a frozen Island though, it's only because of Aokiji that it is like that so I don't know if it is a good example
After another day of sailing and constant snow, they finally saw the outline of Winter Island. The world of One Piece has a very weird relationship. Any island that was bone freezing cold, they tend to be more technologically advanced. Be it Drum Island which was medically advanced, Karakuri island which was supposed to be the birth place of Dr. Vegapunk or Egghead Island which was the current home of Dr. Vegapunk. All of these islands were winter islands which was a very odd thing to have for a technologically advanced island.
Journey to the One Piece
Anime & Comics · thelightedghost
LEZDUIT !!!!!!!!
''I-I love you, John.''
A Soulsborne's Traveler System
Anime & Comics · Bronz_Deck
Honestly, I don't think Hawks would react like that, he is someone capable of being rational no matter the situation.
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My Chaos Academia: Brotherhood (MHA/BNHA)
Anime & Comics · Empe_ror99
1 year in the real world means 7 years in the Dream World. Seven years is clearly long enough when you know that Luffy reached his current level of haki mastery in less than five years and that he dreamed himself being talented in every subject in the Dream World.
Training-wise, Dante had made a lot of progress too! Although only one year had passed in the real world, our main character had spent a whole seven years training in the Dream World, it was plenty of time for him to master pretty much all the skills he worked on. Be it the Hinokami Kagura, Haki, Rokushiki, or his swordsmanship and hand to hand combat training, Dante became extremely proficient in all of them, he could already go head to head skill wise with some of his teachers in terms of skill!
Dreaming in MHA
Anime & Comics · Black_Nemesis
That's because one type of energy equals an entire power system. You have to look at it like the MHA world is its own world. Be it Nen, Chackra, Curse Energy, etc, all of those do not exist in the MHA, so if Dante uses his powers to create new types of energy, it would be the same as him introducing a new concept to the MHA world, and that would be extremely expensive in terms of energy. By using stamina as the cost, Dante is using something that already exists, plus, stamina is something easier to develop than any form of energy, so he is in fact saving dream energy by using stamina as the "currency".
"That's also the reason why I put so much importance on my body! Since I plan to use my stamina to use any kind of power I would have in the future, I need to be strong in that aspect! If not, I won't even be able to fire a single attack!"
Dreaming in MHA
Anime & Comics · Black_Nemesis
Dante's costume was pretty simple if it could be called a costume at all. Since he wasn't a fan of skin-tight costumes or anything overcomplicated, Dante simply decided his costume to be a black shirt with black pants and a long black coat.
Dreaming in MHA
Anime & Comics · Black_Nemesis
I agree. One of the negatives points of this fanfic is that you often see moments where Ken is berating other characters just so that he could have his moment of moral superiority or something. Honestly, from what I have seen of mr Pink, I'm pretty sure he wouldn't have reacted like that, I also think that a lot of charcters are badly portrayed in this fic, Sengoku being one of them by the way.
"I don't know what I am talking about? You lied to your girlfriend from the very beginning and then even married her based on this lie. If it was the other way around, I am sure you wouldn't have been so merciful. She lost her child and even went to a vegetative state, and you thought by wearing the baby dress all your life you can wash away the guilt of what you had done. And you know what is the worst part of you? You continue doing the same job which had actually landed you in this situation in the first place." Ken said.
Journey to the One Piece
Anime & Comics · thelightedghost