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Leonardo_Black

Leonardo_Black

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Leonardo_Black
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*Thick* instead of think

Adam was fidgeting in his armor when he first got a glimpse of the beast. It was a big spiky boar, probably the same height as Adam. It had curved teeth that jutted from its mouth and bent backward towards its eyes. It also had pointy, think hairs in its back that probably were tougher than Adam's spears.

System Creator

System Creator

Fantasy · Leonardo_Black

Leonardo_Black
Commented

if he was *part* of

Fighting without any defense items, as the Tengu did, was not an option for Adam. If he was of many fights, he was bound to get hit sometime. He would rather be hurt than die right away.

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Fantasy · Leonardo_Black

Leonardo_Black
Commented

life *before* coming

This line of answers interested Adam. Yorky had been quiet about the tribe's life very coming to the village. He supposed the happiness of owning the weapon and the distraction he now could see had broken the barrier.

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Fantasy · Leonardo_Black

Leonardo_Black
Commented

Fix - ...the true name of...

"Remember that devils cannot outright lie. They are skilled in omitting important information or just providing the facts they want you to know" it sounded more distant every second. "And remember to find out their true name of the devil. They have to follow instructions if you order it under their true name".

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Fantasy · Leonardo_Black

Leonardo_Black
Commented

Typo - Should be Irulan

"Irusan-sama, where are we? How do I get to the nearest human village?" Adam asked her. He was trying to move the story along without having to die. Befriending the animal might be a secret solution the programmers had set. If he managed to get to a safe zone and log out, he could post and maybe increase his followers. He would not miss out on this advantage.

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Fantasy · Leonardo_Black

Leonardo_Black
Commented

Typo - Should be Irulan

"You can call me Irusan, little human" she said.

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Fantasy · Leonardo_Black

Leonardo_Black
Leonardo_Black
Leonardo_Black
Commented

you're the strongest here..

"Master I think it is time for a .... 'Test of strength' so to speak with your companions. We all know your the strongest here either due to your abilities or creativeness, but the others have been wanting to show off a bit and to also blow off some steam after what you put us through."

My life as a reborn monster

My life as a reborn monster

Fantasy · Forsakenneel

Leonardo_Black
Leonardo_Black
Commented

What you meant is that there are people now working in VR games, doing things that none did before, right? I suggest " a new line of work" or "a new kind of profession", something like that.

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Second World

Second World

Games · UnrivaledArcaner

Leonardo_Black
Leonardo_Black
Commented

I suggest changing "actual" for "current"

"Good, you can go now. I'm someone from too long ago, so nothing that I know can help you with the actual universe cultivation system. Still, I'm looking forward to seeing how far you can go."

Is that a Wisp?

Is that a Wisp?

Eastern · Suiyan

Leonardo_Black
Commented

pull >> full

Krune opened all his 9 Elemental Meridians at pull power, and soon, one could see a Whirlpool of Spiritual Energy rushing at him. Lani looked at that and was once again surprised. That rate of absorption of spiritual energy is even higher than he expected! He looked at Lucio and said.

Is that a Wisp?

Is that a Wisp?

Eastern · Suiyan

Leonardo_Black
Commented

change "I" for "and", right?

After a few more exchanges, Lucio once more found an opening in Krune's defense and immediately charged in. Krune noticed that I tried to retract his Shields, but it was too late.

Is that a Wisp?

Is that a Wisp?

Eastern · Suiyan

Leonardo_Black
Commented

is it days? or hours?

Krune then spent the next days practicing and listening to his Master's words. Finally, Lucio told Krune.

Is that a Wisp?

Is that a Wisp?

Eastern · Suiyan

Leonardo_Black
Replied to Forsakenneel

that is ok. no worries. keep writing when you can.

"I decided that instead of forcing us to hurry up and get there, I will be making each day a new lesson for you. Today for example will be the proper way to harvest Crystal hearts from any monster ranked 1 and above." He summoned a small knife that glinted as the sun flashed onto its blade. He then stabbed a hole right into the throat of the snake and after making a small incision he put down the knife and started peeling away the skin. "Snake creatures ranked or otherwise are a good source of food. So cut it like this and peel away until there's nothing left but the flesh but be careful of rupturing the intestines and anything dealing with shit as it can completely ruin the meat." He shows us the right way to harvest the mead and even showed us that by using the snakes skin aslong as it wasn't damaged to badly it could serve as a fluid container.

My life as a reborn monster

My life as a reborn monster

Fantasy · Forsakenneel

Leonardo_Black
Replied to Forsakenneel

that is cool. I was just pointing them out if you want to correct them you want me to stop? I like your story a lot

"I decided that instead of forcing us to hurry up and get there, I will be making each day a new lesson for you. Today for example will be the proper way to harvest Crystal hearts from any monster ranked 1 and above." He summoned a small knife that glinted as the sun flashed onto its blade. He then stabbed a hole right into the throat of the snake and after making a small incision he put down the knife and started peeling away the skin. "Snake creatures ranked or otherwise are a good source of food. So cut it like this and peel away until there's nothing left but the flesh but be careful of rupturing the intestines and anything dealing with shit as it can completely ruin the meat." He shows us the right way to harvest the mead and even showed us that by using the snakes skin aslong as it wasn't damaged to badly it could serve as a fluid container.

My life as a reborn monster

My life as a reborn monster

Fantasy · Forsakenneel

Leonardo_Black
Commented

mead >> meat

"I decided that instead of forcing us to hurry up and get there, I will be making each day a new lesson for you. Today for example will be the proper way to harvest Crystal hearts from any monster ranked 1 and above." He summoned a small knife that glinted as the sun flashed onto its blade. He then stabbed a hole right into the throat of the snake and after making a small incision he put down the knife and started peeling away the skin. "Snake creatures ranked or otherwise are a good source of food. So cut it like this and peel away until there's nothing left but the flesh but be careful of rupturing the intestines and anything dealing with shit as it can completely ruin the meat." He shows us the right way to harvest the mead and even showed us that by using the snakes skin aslong as it wasn't damaged to badly it could serve as a fluid container.

My life as a reborn monster

My life as a reborn monster

Fantasy · Forsakenneel

Leonardo_Black
Commented

your >> you're

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