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MJHolmgren
LV 1Just trying to create something - hope you like my stuff!
2020-06-01 Joined NorwayBadges 3
Moments 9
Yes, it is coming out hopefully by tomorrow. Sorry for the delay! And thank you for reading and giving feedback!
ch 17 "I Will Pour Down for You a Blessing, Edi"
A Place Under the Ocean
Sci-fi · MJHolmgren
Drippy indeed!
Thanks for the review and all the GIFs! MJH
Hey, thanks. Yep, I am aware that it can be a bit disorientating. Please keep reading, and thanks so much for the response! M. J. Holmgren
ch 13 "A Fool is Reckless and Careless, Edi".
A Place Under the Ocean
Sci-fi · MJHolmgren
Saw your comment on my forum post now, I think you commented on it in November last year. Sorry about that, I totally missed it. Anyway - not too familiar with this universe. I think you write well, but writing in present tense really throws me off, sorry. An example is " ... Yosari gets up and prepares ... " vs. "Yosari got up and prepared" runs better for me (and many others, I think). Do come and read my stuff if you want. M. J. Holmgren
ch 0 1 Prologue: Veteran's Day
Avatar: Macai's Journey
Anime & Comics · Brian_Hanes_117
Repetetive "barren" used twice. But good
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Unraveling Despair
Urban · XXXXC
Thank you! Just started out, working on the 2nd chapter aws. Will probably make adjustments along the way, but thank you so much! MJH
ch 0 1 "Remember My Chains, Edi"
A Place Under the Ocean
Sci-fi · MJHolmgren
Sorry, what "shameless promoting"? I just said "read my stuff if you want". I see nothing "shameless".
ch 0 1 Prologue: Veteran's Day
Avatar: Macai's Journey
Anime & Comics · Brian_Hanes_117