Don't apologize, you actually helped me quite a lot. I was wondering if you had a discord?
The story was great and left me intrigued as to what would happen next. The writing quality is good, but could use some minor fixes. The world and character building were great, after reading I felt some type of attachment towards them, making me want to read more. I love system novels, and this one is a great addition to my library! I will continue to read as the story develops. I definitely recommend this novel!
I re-examined the two chapters and only found two misspelled words. I partially agree with overusing the complex words and am currently working on fixing it. Also, you are being far too hyperbole on the grammar, as it is not as bad as you are saying it is. I appreciate you taking your time to review and give feedback on every last paragraph in my novel, it helped greatly. Although I did disagree on some things, I still appreciate the effort you put in to help make my novel better.
Only the last part where I mention that he would accidentally kill his maids. Other than that, the rest was supposed to be relatively serious.
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This paragraph was to give the readers a sense of Wei Xiang's power. Mentioning how others perceived him as a god was important and the fact that he was more or less a god.
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Yes, I partly agree with you on this. I am working on making the word choice better so to avoid confusion. Also, the words were only misspelled before, not misused. Ex: I used "buttled," when I meant "befuddled."
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You can't underline or use italics on WN, unless you're contracted.
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Exact range? Did you read the part where I said "could be roughly evaluated?" Six five to seven feet tall is an extremely rough measurement. not an exact range. Also, many readers on WN are from different countries so I felt it was important to include a commonly used measurement in other parts of the world.
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The quality and structure is very good. The story development as well as character development is just as good. The unique MC gives me a new taste and has me interested in future developments. Overall, a good story so far. As the novel progresses, I will most assuredly read more.
*NOTICE* If you are getting an error, then go to the Table of Contents and access the chapter from there. Sorry for the inconvenience.
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