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DogPerson
male LV 1Novice writer, avid novel and manwha reader, interested in dark fantasy. Hate clichés.
2020-09-10 Joined GreeceBadges 4
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Yeah, he is as dark and shadow you can imagine him. By the way, it's nice to see there are people noticing this, although I often take too long breaks due to a very heavy workload and studies. I will try to make a lot of chapters now that summer is coming and will get some free time to write hopefully.
ch 27 A reignited resolve
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Fantasy · DogPerson
When I was writing this part I wanted the MC to only make the sacrifice because in his way of thinking it would not be detrimental to his future. Thus I was between his taste and his sense of pain. I have a friend I contact when it comes to medical things in the novel, and according to him it is possible for people who don't feel pain to suddenly die because they have not realized an internal injury. Also him being able to feel pain makes it a lot easier for me to describe certain things which otherwise would not be possible. Thanks for the observation, and hope to see you again in later chapters
ch 0 7 A new enemy appears
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Fantasy · DogPerson
XDDDDD, I feel you mate, nice to see you again guys
ch 21 An unseen opponent
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Fantasy · DogPerson
Exactly, thanks for noticing, the MC as you may have seen always criticizes how other people are bad, but not because of their immediate actions, but because he sees their actions as a result of a corrupt and selfish person. Therefore, in his way of thinking, the end justifies the means. And because of that, in his eyes, he is a self righteous person who aims to correct the world and get rid of all evil(The last part about his desires hasn't been explicitly stated in the story, because his goals haven't yet been revealed) Although the MC is a logical person, his psychological state is by no means normal.
ch 16 A dangerous encounter
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Fantasy · DogPerson
Thank you greatly for the kind and empowering words, and allow me to apologize for my recent inactivity.
ch 18 Kingslayer
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Fantasy · DogPerson
Why can't he become a pugilist? The first one who the glorify did it....
"Why does he train so hard?...He knows that he can't become a pugilist..." Wondered Sarah, sitting at the side of the bed.
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Fantasy · KJun
I find it strange how he didn't exercise or train at all. I mean the first Purgist reached the peak through sheer training and effort, others should be more motivated in training. The people that actually need to train more should be the ones with no ability, unless the want to be small fry forever. Couldn't he actually learn martial arts or practice shooting? A gun is and on most occasion will be very effective against another human, if not low level monster. Just commenting on how a person would probably deal with such a situation compared to the MC who apparently didn't have the slightest determination to become stronger.,
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Fantasy · KJun
True, now that you phrase it like that indeed I should have thought of it this way... Will think of how to implement it..
By repeating this a few times I wouldn't need to use the artifact's power.
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Fantasy · DogPerson
Goblin got Plot Armor
At that moment, the mysterious crystal it had discovered near a meteorite crash site, due to being in close proximity with the soulless body of the chieftain, began pulsating and with a mortifying voice, whispered to the goblin ...
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Fantasy · DogPerson
One's aura can be amplified and manipulated through the use of magi, and especially the killing intent is either generic or a result of aura manipulation. The higher the Sense stat the better the manipulation of aura. I see what you mean, I try to make the MC learn about how auras work in following chapters where he is not pressed by time or danger, but for now yes it might seem unclear how it all works.
Furious and unable to control my emotions, the red killing aura I had constantly suppressed was unleashed and surrounded the group of young goblins.
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Fantasy · DogPerson
Thank you, your words are very encouraging
ch 16 A dangerous encounter
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Fantasy · DogPerson
As you may have noticed, the updates are somewhat slow, as I have numerous classes to attend to. But it is in my best effort to find time to write at least 1 or 2 chapters per week. I pray that readers aren't very disappointed about this, as I try to make every chapter as "canon-important" as possible. (Meaning I try to make the flow of the story have a fast pace but also contain as much info and character development as possible) Therefore no chapter will seem like a filler episode.
ch 16 A dangerous encounter
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Fantasy · DogPerson
Also he seems to be unaccustomed to using magic, which I find odd when considering that an average person that wielded the ability to throw an ***** male using only his mind, would have probably spent months experimenting on it's limitations and it's control. But let's say he recently learned of magic, it wouldn't make sense if instead of training he would continue his job, let alone use his possibly extremely dangerous magic on a living person.
Dave winced as the guard slid to the floor. He hadn't expected it to be that hard, but there was no blood so he couldn't worry too much. He had enough on his mind already. He pushed through the doors and into the building.
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Fantasy · MarcelRogers35
Although stated in the synopsis that there is magic, it is a distracting for the readers when the MC suddenly uses telekinesis, as up to this moment there is no information on what are the principles of your magic system. (Could have made the MC perform a quick chop or something to knock out the guard instead of introducing magic this way) **: not relevant to the comment but towards creating a magic system I recommend you to watch this video on YouTube: On Writing: hard magic systems in fantasy [ Avatar l Fullmetal Alchemist l Mistborn ] (Feel free to remove the comment as it's purpose is to inform you)
When Dave was close enough, he flung his hand out at the guard, throwing a wave of force that sent his head snapping back into the glass door with a dull thump.
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Fantasy · MarcelRogers35
And it's not like the MC is the only one that can do it. Using it is very familiar for most challengers
Despite harnessing a lot of my magi to boost my body's reaction time and strength, I was the one pushed back, maybe due to my lack of actual combat experience or simply due to my low combat-related stats.
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Fantasy · DogPerson
Oh ... I lacked the guts to research that part, compared to the majority of injuries happening in the story. PLOT HOLE... let's just say his fingers thrusted so deep that they reached the cranium and that's how they broke...
With my opponent unable to strike momentarily, I seized the opportunity and thrust my fingers into both of his eyes, taking away the goblins' eyesight and shattering my index and middle finger.
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Fantasy · DogPerson
Magi, essentially, as a form of energy, can be also used as an extra fuel and so it allows one to manually boost any process of his body
Despite harnessing a lot of my magi to boost my body's reaction time and strength, I was the one pushed back, maybe due to my lack of actual combat experience or simply due to my low combat-related stats.
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Fantasy · DogPerson
Yes, kind of, it is referred to in gymnastics as mainly the abdominal area (abs) , at least that's what I have seen. So it is also the center of gravity I think?
At that moment, I used all the magi I could muster in the milliseconds I had till the goblin's blade struck me and twisted my core in order to protect my vital organs.
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Fantasy · DogPerson
I am sorry to have let down all the readers that have been waiting for new chapters This was a hobby of mine and I had to put it on hold due to career reasons. However, as things have been going towards a direction that I will have more free time available, I will try to start writing new chapters for the story. So keep checking every now and then and maybe you will be surprised Have a nice day and sorry for the late reply
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Fantasy · DogPerson