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Allivonk
female LV 2I'm an aspiring author with a dream of being published tbh also hmu if you want to exchange feedback!
2020-09-23 Joined CanadaBadges 4
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That's so sweet :'o
ch 11 11 - Lilly
Survival of the Fittest
Sci-fi 路 Allivonk
The dialogue is getting better and better and I love how the story is picking up! I can't wait to read more [img=recommend] My favourite thing will always be the way you describe the setting of the story.
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Your descriprion skills have really improved!! The fighting scene betwee Vaos and Vulcan was super entertaining to reas, but i find myself like Vulcan more (; hahah
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The katana!!!!!! ah what a great weapon to introduce
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The description here... Damn, I love it !!![img=recommend]
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I acrually really like how you switch POV鈥檚 here, its super smooth
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Damn :.( Got me feelin bad for Brook!! I like your story and you have a strong setting and storyline :)
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Always Her
TV 路 happy_feet22
There were a few grammar mistakes, but none of those really matter! Your story is very captivating and draws you in. You immediately start to see through the eyes of Edward and Alexander. I really like the way that you introduce the setting and describe the scenery and atmosphere! I think if you maybe put in a bit more about what Alex is feeling or looking like (cringing or like smirking) it would be even more amazing than it already is! Damn though, I'm really excited for the next chapter :O [img=recommend][img=update]
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I'm loving the way that you introduce the scene and setting. It's really good description and puts you in the place where they are too :o
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Im so excited for what will happen next 馃槺