Green_Lon

6mth

Posted

The story is filled with unnecessary details that doesn’t help with the story progression.I read till 67th chapter but the story hasn’t moved much. My advice to author would be to trim the unnecessary fillers and streamline the story a bit.

The Legendary Janitor

Eastern · An_Ineloquent_Pen

Green_Lon

7mth

Commented

meh, a filler chapter, the moment ezio strated explanation about his clone i knew this chapter is going nowhare.

ch 683 Flaws

The Innkeeper

Fantasy · lifesketcher

Green_Lon

8mth

Commented

we used to play pretend give each other different names we would build a rocket ship then we will fly far away used to dream of outer space, but now they are laughing at our face saying wake up you need to make money

Yes, from an outsiders view his life was going great. To be honest even he himself had to admit that there was nothing he could complain about, but regardless he was bored with life. Socializing with friends bored him. His career bored him. He took up a few hobbies to try and find something interesting to do, but nothing worked. He reminisced about his days as a kid when everything was filled with wonder and everything excited him. Playing was exciting, getting new clothes was exciting, meeting friends was exciting, even something as mundane as not losing a pencil till it was completely used up was exciting.

The Innkeeper

Fantasy · lifesketcher

Green_Lon

9mth

Commented

"And no. You can't rub it on me either. That's gay and wrong AF."

Florida Man's General Store in Cultivation World

Fantasy · DamnPlotArmor

Green_Lon

9mth

Commented

revenge is a dish best served cold.

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Getting a Technology System in Modern Day

Sci-fi · Agent_047

Green_Lon

1yr

Replied to ElricOfGrans

how dare you assume Anthony's gender? they/them will cancell you.

[You idiot,] Granin huffs, though I can tell he's excited. [That's not the Dungeon calling you. That's the Ancients. You've got their eye now, boy.]

Chrysalis

Fantasy · RinoZ

Green_Lon

2yr

Commented

Thinking of such a possibility, Berengar instinctively sneered in disgust at the man as he introduced himself to Berengar in a way that lacked the proper respect afforded to a man of his position. The man spoke with a heavy Spanish accent, immediately telling he was not a German speaker by birth.

Tyranny of Steel

History · Zentmeister

Green_Lon

2yr

Commented

what else can you expect from person from FREEDOMLAND!!

The grenadiers would clear buildings by lobbing their grenades inside and waiting for the blast before storming in with their muskets loaded and ready with bayonets affixed. Berengar did not care about civilian casualties in a warzone; he only cared about how efficiently his army could handle the task with minimal casualties on his own side.