Webnovel Author: Ruemari_Cordan - Novel Collection

First of all, I get the idea of the book. The blurb of the story will interest you from reading it, but there's something lacking in your story. It's lacking of description that will make the readers get hook in the story though little improving will do. Second, I noticed that you always put the dialogue tag before the dialogue though it isn't bad to use it, but using it every conversation will disrupts some readers (or maybe just me). You can just put it at the end of dialogue and be careful with the punctuation because it'll affect the flow of story if not use in right way. Lastly, I don't think if it's right for me to say this since I'm not good on it, but you should work on your grammar. You don't need to be perfect on it, just a little editing and it might work on your story. Nevertheless, I understand that the story might not interest everyone at first but no one knows how the story goes on and it might become a good and interesting novel in the future as the story continues. P.S. I'm sorry if I offended you in some ways, but I want to give you an honest feedback so you can improve for the next chapter. Keep up the good work 👍

The story is interesting from the start, every chapter has a revelation that you didn't expect and it has good narration as if every scenes playing inside your mind. It's just my opinion but you should refrain from using too much ellipses (...) and unnecessary expression that you can just show in better way so the readers will engaged to it. Overall, it's a well-made story and I highly recommend it to everyone who loves to read a fantasy story.

Thank you for pointing out those lacking parts on my story. I'll make sure to remember it and used your advice well in the future chapters.

First of all, the story seems catching even from the starts that you will wonder what kind of fate Daniel and the death/grim reaper will encounter as the story goes on. Second, I really like the way you narrate/describe the scenes, thoughts and action of the characters it's understandable. Lastly, your grammar and chosen words it's good. I expect a lot of interesting things to happen in this story.

The story is interesting from the start that readers will get hook from reading it and the way the author described the world they live in, the situation they're facing and the characters action I can say that it's very understandable. Besides, the plot was well-written and planned. I highly recommended this story for everyone, you won't get disappointed.

I'm glad to help you a bit. Keep improving your writing it's such a good story😁

This story has an interesting plot. The way the author balanced the narration and dialogue made the story more interesting to read, you won't even get bored. Every chapter will make you read more. Besides, the character design seems good. They both have an interesting attitude and behavior. I hope it continues until the story ends.