I like the way you use you words, It flows very well. I'm liking the story, and even the first chapter had a very strong opening and strong ending. Keep it up. You're doing very well.
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Sorry for the late reply. it's Gabuji#7463
If you're going to write a story like this you might as well go all out. Use the words associated with this "thing" you're talking about. Trust me, we know what it is.
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Urban · Madym
It was very interesting. I never really read a story like this and for what the story is, I enjoyed it. I'd like to see what the MC ends up doing. Like if she branches off and lives life her way, or stick to ways she knows.
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Thank you. I dislike missing mistakes but I guess it's bound to happen. Thank you again
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Sci-fi · Gabuji
From what I read I like this story. I always enjoy when there's a confident strong enemy, that just gets wailed on unexpectedly by someone they underestimated. Plus, I like strong female leads.
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That is because if I were to write the same way without the names you'd get confused very fast.
Gala
Sci-fi · Gabuji