So he just left the adventurers dead bodies? Didn't even loot them?
Meng Lei ventured deeper into the Magical Beast Forest without any hesitation.
Eastern · Panda Reunion
What happened to the Beast Horse?
ch 57 Wiping Out The Bandits, A Spatial Ring
Eastern · Panda Reunion
If we're doing a time skip, Is he taking care of Jonah and the other 2's expenses? He only claimed to give 200 to each of the boys but didn't say he was helping the girl. I just assumed it was implied but nothing has ben said yet.
ch 28 Earth-Element Talent, Mid-Term Examination
Eastern · Panda Reunion
Why did he not get a backlog of achievements? There should be a heck of a lot between just a decent sized faction to fully owning a kingdom. He didn't even get like, Kingslayer. He also completely routed 3 different forces.
ch 97 Interlude
Fantasy · KillerHemboy
I just found this story. I'm so excited to start this journey. This is the exact kind of story I love.
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Fantasy · RinoZ
Literally this whole paragraph needs fixed. Multiple words are wrong and some phrases are off. Really through off the reader.
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Others · The_High_Father
I'm a little annoyed that you left the cannon 'no Quidditch' in. It's an international sport that could be used greatly by the MC, politically. Not only that but he's not shown to have made any talks from his company's to make the events better for the public to see. Maybe you fix this in even the next chapter. By not seeing it and other exploits by now, with his future knowledge, it is making this supposedly genius level MC seem short sighted. He has super long term goals but never deals with things until it happens. Or plans for something way in advance that could have just been easily fixed.
ch 122 Ch. 122 Durmstrang and Beauxbatons
Book&Literature · Alexander_the_grey
I don't get why he didn't just take it. Send it back to Flamel, plop it on Dumbledores desk afterwords. Anything but letting something bad happen. Same with just letting the trio go all the way through the traps.
ch 58 Ch. 58 Ones Desires
Book&Literature · Alexander_the_grey
Before I read more I wanted to put my thought down. I could see panicking at the end of the chapter for him. But he literally has portals down to an art. I'll see how you handle it but there's plenty of ways for him to survive the fall. Even pretending to get hurt to be taken to a Hydra base since he knows they took Bucky. Now, onward with the story!
ch 22 Unexpected Change Of Events
Anime & Comics · Karstag
It's interesting. But nothing new. The dialogue is cookie cutter, quick and non-detailed interactions, etc. It's just too bland for me. A good start, but overall the interactions leave much to be desired as it doesn't give us much insight into the MC other than a Mary Stu like character. Besides the plots already been given away with him being able to instantly steal someone like Magnetos power with no-one being the wiser. Xavier also wouldn't have been able to find him with this version of Gamer Mind as you have him completely immune to telepathy. This might get better. I hope you continue to write for your own joy. But it's too vanilla and rushed for me.
ch 0 1 The Screen
Anime & Comics · DanteMustDie
Honestly I'd expect more exp.
You have crafted [Smart Meta-Optical Mask], gaining 5,000 exp!
The Legendary Mechanic
Games · Qi Peijia