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Kasrna

Kasrna

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2020-11-03 Joined Philippines

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"Like a robot, she immediately switched >> off << the smile >> off << her face and >> plonk << herself down on her office chair." *the 'off' is repetitive. I suggest rewriting this sentence. For ex. "Like a robot, she immediately switched the smile off her face..." and other examples. *i believe the 'plonk' is of the wrong tense and should be 'plonked'.

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Kasrna
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I suspected it was that- I usually go by 'tsk' or 'tsked' but this is a new glimmer of knowledge.

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Kasrna
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AHHH! LOVE THE MINDSET.

Kasrna
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MUST BE PROTECTED.

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Kasrna
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Love Aria so much---

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Kasrna
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exactly, don't be mean system 馃槅

Kasrna
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the apostrophe at the end of this paragraph doesn't coordinate with the rest as it seems this is not the end of what the system has to say.

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"The smugness radiating from the ball feels tangible >> , << as it rests on her shoulder." the comma is unnecessary.

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i think the comma here is unnecessary. "but a slow, thundering, beat echoes >> , << within, and beyond..."

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Kasrna
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it's an interesting start, albeit, feels a lot like a portfolio.

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Kasrna
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poor man.

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Kasrna
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oh?

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