Sorry, I can't see where you posted this comment. Were you talking about the first paragraph of the story? Cuz if you were, it's supposed to be like it, and thank you for telling me that it was confusing! But if it wasn't, I'll definitely change it.
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Fantasy · Crystal_Waters_2277
lol no. Aang is definitely dead. But there will be more romance as I get closer. this is pretty slow-burn tho.
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Fantasy · Crystal_Waters_2277
Thanks for pointing that out!
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Fantasy · Crystal_Waters_2277
Of course not! I want you to do it, or I won't be able to get better. I feel bad about doing it to you too so maybe we could both just correct whatever we want about each other without feeling bad or being angry ha
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Fantasy · Crystal_Waters_2277
Chapter 6. I didn't know how to write her in but people asked me to so it's a little farther in.
ch 0 3 Chapter 3
Fantasy · Crystal_Waters_2277
ok now im sad. And fun fact he's the same age as my older sis!
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Horror · Prince_nonchalant
Some sort of punctuation after dad. lol sry
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Horror · Prince_nonchalant
Period after "Alright"
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Horror · Prince_nonchalant
He had a phone at 7?? Luckyyy
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Horror · Prince_nonchalant
That's everyone's thoughts rn lol.
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Horror · Prince_nonchalant
Can you tell me the title of the story or link it because I literally just joined this website today and I have NO idea how to navigate this thing.
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Fantasy · Crystal_Waters_2277
Of course! I would love to. Thank you!
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Fantasy · Crystal_Waters_2277
THANK YOU!!! I was trying to edit but it's hard to pick out errors. I was thinking, if you don't mind, could you look over my future chapters after im done editing these ones? I completely understand if you're too busy or can't do this. But please consider it. I could really use someone like you.[img=recommend]
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Fantasy · Crystal_Waters_2277
lolll
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Fantasy · Crystal_Waters_2277
Yea, it's a fanfic. It just wouldn't let me upload it as a fanfic so I had to say it was a novel.
Azula threw lightning at him when she realized that he wasn't going to help her. Zuko rolled out of the way just in time. Aang smiled at him, glad that he finally chose his side. Iroh's face shown with pride and happiness. But that didn't last. The Dai Lee rushed toward them from all angles, surrounding them. They didn't have anywhere to go.
Fantasy · Crystal_Waters_2277
yea your right. I have noo idea how to write a realistic romance cuz I'm only 13 and I've never been in love but in the next few chapters, I'm pretty sure I slowed it down. I don't remember but thanks for pointing that out! I'm still editing the chapters but I haven't really had time but I'll get to it asap!!
"Distractions and romance are luxuries we can't afford." Zuko finished for her and Katara wordlessly nodded her head. He smiled and swallowed his disappointment which was quickly threatening to become angry when he saw that she wanted him too.
A Decleration of Love
Fantasy · Crystal_Waters_2277