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it has a lot of potential but to be honest I lost all Interest. The character simply doesn't make any sense, no one would be that stupid especially after already gaining experience and def not a gamer.

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ok this doesn't make any sense. first off he's a gamer, he would never be stupid e ought to cast a firewall anywhere but on or between him and his enemy, second why would he look for a makeshift weapon. and not cast a spell at the enemy, and third in the dungeon his firewall was too hot to get close too so why would he be able to now? I really do like the book. but it's inconsistencies like these that kinda ruin the flow. I'm not expecting him to be perfect but it should make more sense. no one would be that stupid or panicked after the dungeon experience, especially a gamer.

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ok so I like the concept, writing seems pretty good so far. My only complaint is that yet again in a system novel the MC is hiding his ability for no real reason. it's a world that looks for and protects its saviors so if he told the old man about his ability to level up he would stop at nothing to help him do so.

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