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He crossed over to a new world where humans have magical power. They are called warriors. They use their power to kill the monsters that appear out of nowhere. Dragons, Dungeons, and Magic users are pretty common in this world. If you want to live in peace, you need to have that power. You can also become a powerful clearing dungeon.
In this dangerous world, he has a system that can help him grow stronger. But he didn't want to be a high-profile warrior who attracts much powerhouse attention or become a lab rat. He wants to be Low-profile and grow strong using his system.
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This is amazing, I’m absolutely loving this and it’s quickly become one of my favorites. I have zero complaints except for grammar and I don’t even really care about that. Can’t wait to see where the story goes, excited for the next chapter!
read 40s chap , i like this kind of novel, in some area its become repetitive story thats whats the slow paced novel problem is, i like the mc act like a normal people , easy to read, im bored of those arogant novel, so this one is fresh novel for me , i will read some more-
The story has good potential but with the personality of the mc it loses interest. The mc is weak and stupid but with a great desire to be a hero but is hypocritical in telling himself that he is not a hero when he suffers from a complex hero. His parents went to the dungeon and the sister to the class and the mc instead of going to a new dungeon is always training result his parents arriving and he didn't even go to the gost dungeon.
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My guess is all the bad reviews are deleted, cause this is not great. It’ not a bad premise, but very definitely not small upgrades. The writing quality is grade school level, or non native English speaker level
The story has a lot of potential, it is a great idea, but unfortunately has terrible execution. The fighting is explained terribly and the author makes a lot of mistakes, he forgets what he has written already, and English is clearly not his first language
First of all props for putting your story out there takes hard work to do that. now saying that , the story feels like it needs some major editing and proof reading. some of the sentences just dont make sense so wilr i say cheers for your work and story ideas, ima bow out on reading more of this. salute
pretty good novel so far but author please re-write the chapters and use grammarly.. there are so many mistakes and the kind of mistakes that if you use even the free version of grammarly it will fix most mistakes.. or maybe even get an editor even though it costs it would be worth it as many will stop reading if the quality doesn't rise
As a fan of many authors, and with the respect I have for those who work hard to make their novels readable, I say now that this novel is very unreadable, the author hasn’t bothered to understand how to use the English language properly when writing. Errors everywhere. For those of you who keep up with this l.n. Props to you, you’re seriously a different breed. But for the author I say, read English literature, don’t stick to reading light novels all the time, because in the long run you won’t improve your English writing if you don’t have a solid grasp on the writing technique. Also read English dictionaries. And do free English lessons using an app or the internet. I can tell you’re young so you have a lot of potential. This novel is truly just your start and I hope your writing technique on your next ones will be so good they can’t even be compared to this one. Alright that’s all I wanted to say. And as a brother this novel is trash get better at writing in English bro.🤙
small small upgrades che.. not bad.. not bad at all.. 👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏
Other than a few spelling errors i have no complaints about this novel, and the spelling errors aren’t even that bad( things like spelling battle as battel). my only advice to the author is that if you’re uploading from a pc then find a decent spellcheck program and run it through that before uploading.
Story OK. To be fair the author did say its his first novel and he isn't a native English speaker. And it shows. Badly. I've dropped it. I rarely drop books just because of writing quality but I couldn't continue.This was as bad as mtl. The bad ones. BUT if you can handle mtl or are not a native speaker then this isn't really a problem. As this was also the authors first work, other problems such as story pacing, character progression, character interaction and behaviour all needs work. Theres a lot of telling and very little showing. This comes with practice, time and experience.My advise to the author as simply a fan of light novels is to read more well written English novels. Not translated, but actual English novels. You'll pick up a lot and it'll help you construct your novels better in tbe future.For anyone who read all this and want an actual review.. Transmigration story where male MC gets into modern world with monsters. System makes him cultivate stronger. For once the original body isn't some begger or poor son which is actually refreshing. It's why I think this author with some work and experience can actually write a good novel in the future.
Quite like it despite the constant use of incorrect words, and the odd misspelling :) For not having English as first language its okay, but would advise the author to use spell check before uploading.
It's a fresh approach. I quite like it. Hope the writer continues to post it regularly. Can't wait to see the new chapters. Thank you for the great work.
I'll be completely honest here, I want to like this novel a lot more than I currently do. Writing quality: honestly leaves a lot to be desired, grammar is at times terrible. This wouldn't matter as much if it wasn't for the rampant inconsistency of information given out throughout the story. Story development: is very, very slow, again not a big deal, but the constant changing of basic information given out makes it very hard to follow and quite frankly quite tedious to read at times. Character design: I think the concept is good, and I really appreciate that the mc has for lack of a better word "normal" family life. But there's little to no interaction with others so far(50 chapters in, and we can count the people he's spoken to enough to warrant actual conversation text on 1 hand). Updating stability: I've given this full marks since I'm only 50 chapters in, and I don't know. World Background: Again I love the concept, I really do. I always appreciate a good system and the fact that there's a system for everyone not just mc (albeit not as extensive as the MCs but skills and rating exist for all as well as stones to absorb etc.)
The concept behind the story itself is good. But the mc is shown practically as machine whose only job is to eat, sleep, train and dungeon run.. and close to no human interaction. Writing quality is average to say the least as many grammatical mistakes and wrong usage to words can be seen. well, for story development there is nothing of a story only a sort summary of his background and what is now then he just goes around training and dungeon running with no human or world interaction... Character design. . . well, at least the characters that author had given importance to are well described and designed but later in story i got the feeling that the story is all about mc dungeon running with no outside interaction. update stability.. .i don't know about this... World background well, it is well described but as we progress only mc's home, motel and dungeon becomes readers world because nothing is told or happens with mc in relation to that. So in short if you want to read a novel where mc just focuses on getting stronger with nothing else in mind then go ahead. (well, after many chapters some world opening happens with mc but still it can be considered negligible interaction with outer world)
interesting concept but falls a bit short. I ended up just skimming the chapters at some point since there are a lot of repetetive "he freshend up, ate, and went to sleep. woke up and trained.." repeating. and it is to slow paced for my taste. dropped when I felt it had been aged since he progressed in any meaningful way and I looked ahead seeing there were still like 30 chapters until his next breakthrough.
Nice novel. As the author's first novel, it is awesome. ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️
I reduced a star for story development coz according to me... it's slow pace... you can say it's like a daily log... I hope it speed up 🙂..... other than that ... good novel.... for a first time writing... author is awesome 🤯💯👍
Hi, the author here. It's my first novel guys. I am pretty inexperienced about but I will try to become better at this. I hope you will enjoy this novel.