I like to write fantasy. Any and all constructive critisiscm is appreciated! If you'd like to contact me to go more in depth about anything, leave a comment behind.
2021-01-03 Joined Belgium
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"Stand still!" Julian immediately pulled back on the joystick, causing the lamppost to slowly come to a standstill. A swift circle of the joystick later and the steel pole was already on the way back to try to get in another hit. As the man jumped back on his feet, his right arm hanging uselessly from his side, he smirked and reached into his pocket. A dim silver glow erupted from his left hand, ending when a new gun materialized between his fingers.
Fantasy · Chaoscaller
Most excellent! Can't wait to read your review!
Oh, I am working on that. No worries.
ch 0 1 Chapter 1: Under the scarlet sky
Fantasy · Chaoscaller
While I do see where you are coming from, Julian just isn't the type to be humourous. Due to his psyche, he isn't a jokester. Instead, he is a cold calculating individual shaped by some evens in his life.
ch 0 1 Chapter 1: Under the scarlet sky
Fantasy · Chaoscaller
It's not really necessary to mention that. Both characters know what the currency is, and saying otherwise would be expositional dialogue
"2.000 cash," A male voice cut through the silence. "Highest grade, of course." Another voice, a high-pitched male one, bounced against the nearby brick wall of a house.
Fantasy · Chaoscaller
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The night sky was like it always was. Bloody red with a milky-white orb hovering in the middle. The streets were empty; not even a single light protruded from the dark homes. A thick blanket of silence smothered the entire town as shadows reached out for each other through the scarlet glow of the heavens. There were no cars, no drunkards nor businessmen trying to catch the last train. The only two people in the city talked underneath a broken streetlight, whispered to each other as if they were scared the shadows would hear them.
The story of squad 13
Fantasy · Chaoscaller