Just a new aspiring writer here
2021-01-08 Joined Philippines
Another suggestion my friend for the first few lines. I hope you don't mind ahehe... "My eyes fixed at Danton, I got shocked as I heard.... *and so on*" Btw, I enjoyed reading this from the start
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A suggestion for the stuttering part. Instead of putting dots, why not "I-I" and "Wo-Won't"
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And by the way, it's not necessarily be "My eyes fixed on Danton"... This small line is up to you