Life doesn't care about ambitions much. DEEP
"Perhaps you are moving?" The grandpa beside him asked him. "Huh?" Evan was dumbfounded. "Oh... Yea. I am going back to my original hometown." He said when he gains his consciousness. "I see. You seem like an ambitious man, why do you want to move there?" At first, Evan wanted to tell this old Granpa to stop being noisy. But he wanted to be polite so, he just answered. "Well, Life doesn't care about ambitions much." The train stops. The grand-pa stands up and keeps an old journal to the boy in front of him.
Realistic · Anna_07
That's a good sentence, I liked that
But, life doesn't let you have your way always. So, He picks his baggage up and leaves for the countryside. He leaves his ambitions and glory behind and walks ahead towards a path no one knows. He is walking on the road no one has ever heard of, and Evan himself doesn't know where he is heading ahead. As he sat down on his seat, he asks himself, "What are you going to do?" but no answer came. He is now missing inside his thoughts.
Realistic · Anna_07
Though the writing needs to be improved, the story is going pretty good. Why not make it a bit more dramatic than being a bit too straight to the point? Otherwise, this a topic which is least experimented with. Brave reach by the author , all the best
ch 0 3 "The Terrible Heart"
Teen · ParimitaPBorkar
suggestion- It should be women, as plural. Woman is singular. womens is not correct
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Sci-fi · Deep_Sky
The story is quite complex and makes the environment tense. The development is quite good. writing quality is top-notch, but I think it's a bit too overly complexified which actually makes it a bit tough to read. the only reason I took 0.2 stars away is that. but it's not bad, to be honest, it's just a bit too complex. Potential novel here.[img=coins]
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Urban · AngelAnusha