Haha, no, thats a writing skip.
ch 0 2 Let's See What We Have Here
Anime & Comics · BlitzKrieG_K
Way, wag too much telling, and not enough showing. For instance you said the z fighters introduced themselves, vs actually writing the introductions. The difference between telling vs showing is like a Summary vs a scene. You need to write the scene, not a Summary of what happened during the scene.
ch 0 1 1. Awakening
Anime & Comics · Gabe_
Terrible, all telling, and no showing.
ch 0 1 Chapter 1: New World
Anime & Comics · komega
Bad translation. Also why does Dumbledore call himself a wizard to a muggle?
ch 0 1 Chapter 1: Wool's Orphanage
Book&Literature · bobthewriter
Kind of a let down after last chapter.
ch 191 Chapter LIV: Blasphemy
Video Games · Rastislav
Ehh I saw it coming a long time ago, far too cliche. I know you did it justbto don't it, but Morrigan would have been more expected.
ch 190 Chapter LIII: Royal Rumble
Video Games · Rastislav
The fact he even mentions his race is concerning.
ch 0 1 The One Bearing 'All the Evils of the World'
Anime & Comics · U22
Robot translation.
ch 0 1 Chapter 1
Anime & Comics · Uchiha_shisui
Luna, idc, if he is in her brother body lol. She best girl.
ch 0 1 Waking up
Book&Literature · Bter
One the best works ever posted here in web nove. Keep it up!
ch 182 Chapter XLV: Of Divine Staves and Elven Goons
Video Games · Rastislav
Too many weird issues. For instance Martha SMELLED the crash. How can you smell a crash?
ch 0 1 Chapter 1: The Second Spaceship Descends on Kent Farm (Edited)
Anime & Comics · INIT
you cant even get the names correct, its Lucifuge, Not Luci-fudge. beyond that, the intro was so boring. Why are you telling us, instead of showing us? the very first chapter and its a bad, poorly written infodump...
ch 0 1 Chapter 1
Anime & Comics · CrystalWisp
a little too "out there" for a harry potter fanfic.
ch 0 2 Chapter 2 First night
Book&Literature · _Arthas_
I truly don't like the world of Harry Potter changing without his influence. You can add stuff ee didn't see, flesh the world out etc, you can even change the story to include his existence, but nothing else. It feels too contrived to change things out of that scope. You could do anything, no matter how wacky. You also messed a bit already. Prophecy's and riddles of the future are fine, but what you have done is moe rhe characters in the world more like N.P.C'S. Fate and Destiny are terrible plot devices. Up there with amnesia, and the orphan trope in the cliche department. Free will needs to be the centerpiece of any story. This makes the characters real, therfore making the world feel real.
ch 0 1 Another World!
Book&Literature · Ivan_Carrick
The translation is not good enough at all. for instane brother-in-law. why was that used instead of the mans name? therre is a noticable lack of "her""he" and other pronouns where is would be natural. its frankly just bad.
H.P: My Hogwarts Journey
Book&Literature · Comicstorian