Webnovel Author: FrancisXaviEr

4mth

Posted

It is really a great story though every story has its strength and weaknesses and I sincerely believe the dynamics of this book is in fact thrilling to explore

Asteria:into the land of Zoa

Fantasy · FrancisXaviEr

FrancisXaviEr

4mth

Commented

After reading this chapter, i got a clearer glimpse of the worldbuilding and setting of this book which is quite contemporaneous but too dramatic in terms of the style of writing right here. drama sequence tends to rule out a lot of worldbuilding than prose. so I personally would want the writer focus mainly on using the technique of prose which brings out a lot of images into textual reality instead of using drama.

ch 0 2 Conditions of Trust

Avatar: Macai's Journey

Anime & Comics · Brian_Hanes_117

FrancisXaviEr

4mth

Commented

Hmmm. I like the creativity of the first chapter but I honestly want to see where this leads to subsequently

ch 0 1 Prologue: Veteran's Day

Avatar: Macai's Journey

Anime & Comics · Brian_Hanes_117

FrancisXaviEr

4mth

Replied to Brian_Hanes_117

Greetings! I have added your story to my library as well as voted it and I will make a lucid review on it after reading your work. Thanks for your encouragement

"My fellow members, allow me to remind you of the reason why we decided to send Karz to bring back the late chief's daughter to Tyron. The sole purpose of that decision, apart from her predestination to become a red wolf warrior, is to ensure that we enlightened and teach her to understand our customs on how things are done in Tyron for I believe she will obey because Karz told me that the foster parents that took care of her were a good couple so Juno, don't mislead us to believe that she would turn out to be like her siblings that ruled badly in the past if we give her the mantle to rule Tyron. What we should be talking about is how we can teach her our ways and..... ", Samon's speech was interrupted by a voice behind him just as he was about to end his monologue.