Hey, so, I'm a new writer and I'm aiming to improve my writing skills with the novel called 'Ranger'. As of now, the quality of 'Ranger' is clearly below average, but I hope you will give it a go! ^^
2021-02-08 Joined Global
Funstation*
We walked into the apartment, whose lights were still on. I plopped down on the couch and turned on the TV along with the Funsation.
Urban · nzitai
So after reading your first 2 chapters, I went ahead and skipped to check out this one. (I'm not planning on actually reading this story so I don't mind the spoilers). I can see that your writing is now much better than in the early chapters. It's really inspiring to see such progress, I hope you continue writing and find a lot of success with it!
ch 58 The blood moon ceremony
Sci-fi · Khawla_Amini
"the first of 'my' kind" This is either a mistake or is giving away too much information. You might want to change it to "the first of a kind"
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Sci-fi · Khawla_Amini
we'd -> would
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Sci-fi · Khawla_Amini
This reminds me of the ghoul wedding from the "Tokyo Ghoul" manga by Sui Ishida. Well, I'm unaware which came first but I don't care about that, I just wanted to point out a cool fact.
Only mates can mark each other by biting one another on the neck, The mark will keep the other Lycan and Werewolf away from the mates. Only the Lycans and werewolves are able to see the mark on a she-wolf, humans can't see the mark.
Sci-fi · Khawla_Amini
It should be "for herself" right?
We stopped at the FamilyMart, where Sana ran in and bought a matcha for her and a canned coffee for me. We drank our drinks as we walked the rest of the way to the apartment, where I saw Takahashi's car parked on the curb. I still couldn't believe that he drove around in that piece of crap, just because it was from an anime; I admired his dedication to the fandom, though. We escalated the stairs and entered the apartment.
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Urban · nzitai