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boywhotalkswithcat

boywhotalkswithcat

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Hey, so, I'm a new writer and I'm aiming to improve my writing skills with the novel called 'Ranger'. As of now, the quality of 'Ranger' is clearly below average, but I hope you will give it a go! ^^

2021-02-08 Joined Global

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It should be "for herself" right?

We stopped at the FamilyMart, where Sana ran in and bought a matcha for her and a canned coffee for me. We drank our drinks as we walked the rest of the way to the apartment, where I saw Takahashi's car parked on the curb. I still couldn't believe that he drove around in that piece of crap, just because it was from an anime; I admired his dedication to the fandom, though. We escalated the stairs and entered the apartment.

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boywhotalkswithcat
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Funstation*

We walked into the apartment, whose lights were still on. I plopped down on the couch and turned on the TV along with the Funsation.

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Ok, let's get started, my opinion as a 17-year-old, ******* writer: 1. Was I hooked? First, let me clarify something, I came into this novel blind, I don't usually read romantic **** stories like this so I won't be comparing it to anything else. Yes, it did hook me. Why? Because to me, it's a brand new concept, but I am aware that this sort of romance is a common type of novel. "Weak-to-Strong", at least in my eyes, does nothing special, but it has interesting (probably overused) subjects in my eyes. 2. What I liked/disliked: I liked the simple and easy-to-follow style; it is beneficial because I can tell you struggle with grammar (maybe English isn't your first language; just like for me), and otherwise, it would be hard to read this and understand what exactly is going on. So yeah, as you can imagine, what I disliked is the poor grammar, countless spelling mistakes, and lack of time dedicated to perfecting each line. 3. Would I continue reading? Bluntly, no. I'm looking for fiction that can help me improve my writing and give me inspiration. This novel appears to be written for the casual readers that want more of this genre, and don't mind the quality. Overall, I believe your novel has a specific audience and you should work on catering it to that audience, which you seemed to have done perfectly from the parts I read. I would definitely advise you to read other, advanced, and highly rated works similar to this so that you can perhaps improve your grammar and sometimes get inspiration if you are ever lacking it. Also, yes, the grammar in this review is off, I'm aware of it. It's ironic that I'm criticizing their grammar, but I believe this is only to help them improve.

boywhotalkswithcat
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"the first of 'my' kind" This is either a mistake or is giving away too much information. You might want to change it to "the first of a kind"

boywhotalkswithcat
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we'd -> would

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This reminds me of the ghoul wedding from the "Tokyo Ghoul" manga by Sui Ishida. Well, I'm unaware which came first but I don't care about that, I just wanted to point out a cool fact.

Only mates can mark each other by biting one another on the neck, The mark will keep the other Lycan and Werewolf away from the mates. Only the Lycans and werewolves are able to see the mark on a she-wolf, humans can't see the mark.

Weak to Strong : The Hybrid

Weak to Strong : The Hybrid

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