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Y33tus_Maximus

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Why both Divine and Conceptors are represented by lotus flower? Is there backstory for this? Is Conceptors actually a branch from Divine?

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Voyage of the Villainess

Voyage of the Villainess

Fantasy · Aeipathy_02

Y33tus_Maximus
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Isn't it suppose to be Wisteria fixing this?

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Y33tus_Maximus
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thank you for spotting it :) din't notice the "and" typo will fix it now

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Hollow Children

Hollow Children

Fantasy · Y33tus_Maximus

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I see... Sentence structure and grammar, my greatest enemy. XD

Arsha and Paul's statement may come out stiff and out of place but it's the truth, there are not many villages that prospers within kingdom of Ingrasia.

Hollow Children

Hollow Children

Fantasy · Y33tus_Maximus

Y33tus_Maximus
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Thank you for your input. The backstory is explained in the next two paragraphs, I separate it to 3 paragraphs because the paragraph is so long >_< Should I combine them for easier reading?

Arsha and Paul's statement may come out stiff and out of place but it's the truth, there are not many villages that prospers within kingdom of Ingrasia.

Hollow Children

Hollow Children

Fantasy · Y33tus_Maximus

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Did Brian felt it as well?

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Our Happiness

Our Happiness

Teen · basementerz

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Kevin has sister complex?

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Our Happiness

Our Happiness

Teen · basementerz

Y33tus_Maximus
Y33tus_Maximus
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Previously you use ' ' to signify the character is thinking. Need to be consistent or else readers will be confuse.

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Our Happiness

Our Happiness

Teen · basementerz

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From now on I will label Kevin as soccer simp

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Our Happiness

Our Happiness

Teen · basementerz

Y33tus_Maximus
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I felt I was bombard by a lot new characters in every chapter yet none of them is introduced properly. It's fine if they are just side characters that you will scrap after the arc will end, if not then you need to at least give us something to identify them with, like their physical features or demeanour.

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Our Happiness

Our Happiness

Teen · basementerz

Y33tus_Maximus
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Now the male love interest enters the story

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Our Happiness

Our Happiness

Teen · basementerz

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I suggest to run some simulation first before writing down the scenes. The bumping into Evelyn accidentally may look normal at first glance but if you actually think about it their reaction are so out of place.

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Our Happiness

Our Happiness

Teen · basementerz

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If I bumped into someone with my shoulder the most likely scenario is either one of us stagger. Evelyn is quite athletic to recover so fast her have spare time to pat on Charlie's shoulder

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Our Happiness

Our Happiness

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