Why both Divine and Conceptors are represented by lotus flower? Is there backstory for this? Is Conceptors actually a branch from Divine?
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Fantasy · Aeipathy_02
Isn't it suppose to be Wisteria fixing this?
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thank you for spotting it :) din't notice the "and" typo will fix it now
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Fantasy · Y33tus_Maximus
thank you. I was planning on concluding all the battles in one chapter but before I knew it I already reach my self target average word count. now the battle is split across two chapters (=__=|||) Please let me know if you prefer a longer chapter or consistent chapter length.
ch 0 3 Demon
Fantasy · Y33tus_Maximus
I see... Sentence structure and grammar, my greatest enemy. XD
Arsha and Paul's statement may come out stiff and out of place but it's the truth, there are not many villages that prospers within kingdom of Ingrasia.
Fantasy · Y33tus_Maximus
Thank you for your input. The backstory is explained in the next two paragraphs, I separate it to 3 paragraphs because the paragraph is so long >_< Should I combine them for easier reading?
Arsha and Paul's statement may come out stiff and out of place but it's the truth, there are not many villages that prospers within kingdom of Ingrasia.
Fantasy · Y33tus_Maximus
Thank you. please look forward to chap 3 when it comes out
ch 0 1 Girl Meets Boy, Boy Meets Girl.
Fantasy · Y33tus_Maximus
Glad you enjoyed it. :D
ch 0 2 Jerky and Onyxia
Fantasy · Y33tus_Maximus
Did Brian felt it as well?
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Teen · basementerz
Kevin has sister complex?
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Teen · basementerz
Previously you use ' ' to signify the character is thinking. Need to be consistent or else readers will be confuse.
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Teen · basementerz
From now on I will label Kevin as soccer simp
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Teen · basementerz
I felt I was bombard by a lot new characters in every chapter yet none of them is introduced properly. It's fine if they are just side characters that you will scrap after the arc will end, if not then you need to at least give us something to identify them with, like their physical features or demeanour.
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Teen · basementerz
Now the male love interest enters the story
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Teen · basementerz
I suggest to run some simulation first before writing down the scenes. The bumping into Evelyn accidentally may look normal at first glance but if you actually think about it their reaction are so out of place.
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Teen · basementerz
If I bumped into someone with my shoulder the most likely scenario is either one of us stagger. Evelyn is quite athletic to recover so fast her have spare time to pat on Charlie's shoulder
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Teen · basementerz
The story got me hooked right away, I am a sucker for isekai genre, having high hope that this will be interesting. It may be generic but all the characters are likeable, looking forward to the world building and thrilling adventures ahead.
Voyage of the Villainess
Fantasy · Aeipathy_02