Hello goes brrt.
First of all, your novel has an auxiliary chapter that contains information and keys about the novel, which was helpful to understand the novel. I can't put it into words, but I can say that the story's start is good. Keep this up and good luck on your writing journey. I feel sorry for Grandpa Makoto's loss, though.
Fantasy · Seishi_
After reading it, there is something I need to say. The Chapter 1 is brilliant, keep it up. It is also easy to imagine the place where they at and I can't wait to see the MC to grow and have a character development. To sum it all, it is very good.
I don't have the right to complain but introducing many at a time made it hard to imagine the story. However, it is compensated by the writing style and it is quite intriguing. Keep up and Goodluck.
Fantasy · slevink
So, your sypnosis is good. It is worth reading because of how it really kinda summarizing the story. Plus, 28 chapters in a week? It is good on how consistent you are. Keep up and good luck on the contest.
Fantasy · CollinX_BrainZ
I thought this novel's genre was Eastern Fantasy or something but it is not. I love novels with Isekai or Transmigrated genre. Specially, the *Badong!!!* sound effect was good. Keep it up.
Fantasy · Zexekiel
What a good start for a novel. The main character plus the beauty with greenish hue eyes alone already makes the story good. Slow paced story is okay since it will make the thrill stay.
Fantasy · RIKUSAN
What a good start for a novel. A novel which is focused to a bad girl since her childhood. You had a cool FMC plus she's a beauty. Good luck and keep on writing!
Urban · Anony_Mous_1902
The story you have is good. I like novels/stories about music bands. Great initial of the novel. Although, you're not being consistent. I'll just ignore that and still give you 5 star rating. Good luck and keep on writing.
Fantasy · anime_stories
The story itself is good. The consistency of you is also impressive. You also have a good initial company arc. Keep up on doing this novel. Good luck.
Urban · Ice_Witch
Ah yes, a main character with stepmother. Ehem..anyways, the story itself is good. Although your paragraphs are way too long at the first chapters, I ignored that and just enjoy the story. Keep it up.
Fantasy · FlameCookies
The story itself is good. Seeing the first chapter of it, you really had used many commas which is pretty okay. I always neglect those kind of errors or something but it is okay as long as the story is good. Keep it up.
Fantasy · GaoGaoChan
This novel had a potential. It has a great start. Working as a collector and then, maybe the MC will suddenly become stronger or something. I'll wait for more chapters. Goodluck on your novel.
Fantasy · bligboi
So this is my review for this story: Even though that it only has 3 chapters currently, it has many words that compensate it. The story itself is decent and I'll look forward to see the next chapter😉.
Eastern · Tsukasa_
Hello, I am "Takemoto_" which is the author of this novel. I rated my novel "5 star". I know it's kinda bad rating yourself but I need to. The thing that I can say is that Please support my novel. As soon as the story goes to its PLOT, you guys will find it interesting. Next thing that you will know is that you're thrilled to it, hehe. Oh, by the way, here is my other artwork for the MC of this novel "Kayamura Shin". (ps. I am not a good artist so bare with it.)
Action · TataK43_
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First of all, your novel has an auxiliary chapter that contains information and keys about the novel, which was helpful to understand the novel. I can't put it into words, but I can say that the story's start is good. Keep this up and good luck on your writing journey. I feel sorry for Grandpa Makoto's loss, though.
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Fantasy · Seishi_