Webnovel Author: MrChinchila - Novel Collection

Yeah, feels a bit dishonest having two of the same review.

Is this an alt account of yours? Cause you repeated the same review. I'll delete one of them either way, repeated reviews feel awkward and doesn't add much.

Yeah. I'll probably try to step up a bit in my descriptions next chapter.

Yeah, gotta watch out. Some reviews are basically copy paste 5 stars that doesn't help much for us to develop. I call out their attention in the forum and delete copy paste 5 stars reviews. Feels dishonest to have them, you know?

Ok. The potential is there. The story is interesting but I just can't give you a good grade at the writing. There are some glaring things that need correction in regards to that. There rest is well done. The concept is good. But the formatting and the writing needs fixing. I know you can fix it! Good luck!

From what I read so far, I really like your spacial description(the ambiences where the scenes take place). Everything is well written, although you have a tendency of writing ' ... ' a bit too often. Also there is a funny mistake in the first chapters, that REALLY needs to be updated.

So, I really enjoy your prose. The first five(actually six if counting prologue) chapters from what I read were good. There were some rough sentences that need some editing though, that's why I can't grade your writing 5. But if you catch those punctuation details, it would be an easy 5. I checked and you seem to update every 2 days, so your updates are quite stable. Story, Character and World so far for me is a bit early to say, yet from what I read, I'm really enjoying it so far. Keep it up!