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Interesting read! The book is well written with few to no grammatical mistakes; making reading smooth and enjoyable. I have almost no qualms about it. However, as an avid reader of revenge stories, I am missing the true rage from the Protagonist. I feel that if the story were to revolve around her executing revenge along with the male lead- there should be a very solid idea on why she wanted revenge. So far, all I’ve felt from her was fear and regret. Which is not a bad feeling per say, but not justifiable enough for revenge. I don’t feel betrayal, all I felt was that the villager’s actions were extreme. However, since this is only the second chapter, I can’t really say that it’s a deal breaker for the book. If there were a plot twist in later chapters or a sudden burst of anger from the protagonist, I’d say this book would be close to flawless. Just like one of the other reviewers too, chapter one( which I will comment on where I felt was a bit off) had a paragraph that threw me off. If I were to narrow down on what, I would say it is about the elder; why is he so important? Why did he ‘suddenly’ feel evil? And you referred him to as ‘the’ when the readers have yet to know the man. In all, this is a very eye catching story and plays into the idea of those typical rebirth manhwas very well. I had to really read into every sentence to spot mistakes so it just goes to show the effort and time the author put in this book. If it’s a reader’s preferred genre, this would be their perfect pick. Good job and good luck, author! :)

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Wow, what an amazing read! This book is truly a ‘munchable’ read. However as an avid reader, here are my opinions on it! Negative; Taking into consideration that the author is not a monolingual , I do understand certain struggles with writing in english. As a fellow non-monolingual, I too have struggled writing in english. It reflects in my vocabulary and grammar. But not to worry, author! You can always use writing and editing softwares to support your work. Certain errors in your writing would include unnecessary “!”, “immediately”, “suddenly” etc. I’d advise against the use of the last two as it makes your writing choppy >_< ! I don’t know whether this is considered feedback or just my personal taste but, to a certain extent, the characters seem a little shallow. However, taking into fact that there are only 13 chapters, that may explain their choice of characterisation. Positive; The plot is definitely an interesting one. Truly, I’ve never heard of a story centering a ‘God’ descending to humankind. Not a lot of authors can handle writing something so unprecedented and unique but this author really knows his stuff! He has brought forth an idea, blooming it into a special story. Something I bet his readers too can agree on. The author too, pays extra attention to details in his story. The transition of the pronoun change in addressing the main character, from “it” to “him”, matches the transition of the protagonist from “God” to man. Furthermore, the author understands his readers. He has promised quality weekly chapters; an example I’m sure other authors are trying to follow. At last, those were the opinions of the author's story. It was a splendid story by the author. Keep up the good work ! :))

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Thank you so much for the continued support!

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