OldBone

OldBone

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Just your friendly neighborhood writer.

2021-09-14 Joined Global
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OldBone
OldBone
4 years ago
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Need more work on writing quality, especially on using passive and active voice. Points of View are also important in order to know who is speaking and to whom. It is also essential to describe the scene well and make sure that the picture you want to show is conveyed well. Update stability is quite well, but it is better to have a strict schedule. This habit is important when you want to cater to fans. This might be the least fan service an author can do and it is good to develop early on. You might do it for fun now, but retaining loyal readers is hard. Story development couldn't be judged within 7 chapters based on your pace so no need to worry for now. Character designs are confusing, please describe them with utmost devotion, and don't just throw in a mob without a prior character setting. The world is also important so you can't skimp on it. You might be writing tropes that are common, but what makes your novel different is defined by your character design and world-building. How you showcase the world and package it as well as how you play the characters will make your novel distinguishable. LEARN while writing.

OldBone
OldBone
4 years ago
Replied to CloudlessChaser

A4 is a paper size usually used in offices.

Jin reached his storehouse and entered from the side door. Before he proceeded to the underground floor, he created an A4 paper sign and placed it outside. "Not open in the morning for weekdays."

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Fantasy · Moloxiv

OldBone
OldBone
4 years ago
Commented

poor monsters... nochance of becoming juicy gods

"For the Goblin Dungeon Instance, it will be capped at Grade 3 and that grade will be the Extreme difficulty setting for the instance. Another example would be the next mission you will be undergoing. If you succeed in capturing the Lady Snake, you will get a Grade 2 Dungeon and the capped grade for that dungeon will be at Grade 4." Jin took in the information and started to understand how the dungeon instance mechanics worked. While it seemed simple from the start, some minor things that could enhance the experience of the customers.

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Fantasy · Moloxiv

OldBone
OldBone
4 years ago
Commented

what a typical Asian mom

"Yes Jin, your performance was below expectations," Yun said in a straight voice. "Still, you completed your mission, and I will issue you your rewards accordingly."

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Fantasy · Moloxiv

OldBone
OldBone
4 years ago
Commented

dropped

With his senses heightened from the Playful Platypus style, he was able to deduce that the goblins were tired and looking for a place to rest. If they strike now, he might have an advantage against them.

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Fantasy · Moloxiv

OldBone
OldBone
4 years ago
Commented

he can actually monopolize the energy industry

"You will never need to charge this phone ever again. The battery life is infinite, and you do not need to worry about damaging it. The screen is of top military grade and can stop a bullet. Dropping the phone from 101 floors and I can guarantee not a single scratch on it."

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Fantasy · Moloxiv

OldBone
OldBone
4 years ago
Commented

so this is where Amon went

OldBone
OldBone
4 years ago
Commented

The Fool that doesnt belong to this era. The King of Yellow and Black that Wields good luck.

OldBone
OldBone
4 years ago
Commented

kek... weeds and cracks

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"Unfortunately, there are no intact roads in the Blackmarsh Wilderness. Perhaps there's a small section of the road, originating from the Old World, that remains well-preserved along the way. It just has a lot of weeds growing on it. There are certain cracks in the road, but that's just an exception."

Embers Ad Infinitum

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Sci-fi · Cuttlefish That Loves Diving

OldBone
OldBone
4 years ago
Commented

Amon had stolen time

In the blink of an eye, two months passed.

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Sci-fi · Cuttlefish That Loves Diving

  • Castle Guard's Retirement Plan original

    Castle Guard's Retirement Plan

    Fantasy ADVENTURE MAGIC CULTIVATION

    ----------- Please support this novel by donating at Paypal: https://www.paypal.me/arctty ----------- Synopsis: In the vast continent of Mezoph, wherein Legends emerge; I, Morbius Hunt (which is my 40th change of name) is a measly castle guard. For 4000 years, with no progress in life, I have witnessed the birth, summoning, battle and death of Legends. I want to be one of them, but I am just a mere castle guard... maybe... it's time for me to retire. What awaits me in my journey?? I wish I still got 4000 more years to find out.

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