Webnovel Author: Kingkillerdj2023 - Fanfic Collection

Not the Raikage yet.

But they do. LOL.

Nope!! Just an OC since we know little about the Third Mizukage and I wish to give him Kage Level strength.

Of Course!!

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Your Welcome, I guess?

When you can see thousands of future outcomes and see none of them leading to absolutely good result, you would give up as well.

Sorry.

I plan for each chapter of it to be at least 3k+ words, so it'll likely only get updated every week or 2.

Firstly, lets not compare the two timelines in any form. You have Tsunade, Tobirama, and Mito, all whom likely know he is alive now thanks to Tobirama's survival, and they are gradually making preparations for him. How is he expected to steal the Biju from Mito, someone with Uzumaki-level vitality and are hypothesized to live for at least a century while also now being a perfect Jinchuriki and being the best Fuinjutsu user in the world right now, all while Tsunade is present in the Village. I'm not saying Madara is fear Secondly, Madara was is extremely arrogant and prideful, to a heightened degree. Why wouldn't he actively declare war? Better yet, I pose you a question in response, why did Obito reveal himself and the Eye of The Moon plan to the Five Kage? Especially with the fact that he could have continued waiting until their guard was down to make a move? But, even with all of that, I still wouldn't view Madara as a 'Rash Idiot'. But hey, I like comments like this, they keep me entertained.

Hey, fellow Author here!! If you want to start over, I recommend either deleting all your chapters beforehand so that the count and story don't reset in the middle, or just edit your prior chapters. Character Development can take two routes, Obvious or Subtle, with many author's choosing somewhere in the middle. I like the idea of Alvida gaining the devil fruit earlier, but I could see that to accomplish that, you merely could have made a quick mini-arc after Syrup Village that focused on her getting it and Ace changing his opinion on her, with it possibly even leading to a developing love interest. You don't have to take drastic measures. And finally, don't take anyone's opinion to heart except your own. You can't satisfy everybody. Just write to the extent that you feel that you enjoy your own book, since that's all that matters. Good Luck in the Future.