Nothing except English is not my mother tongue and that I'm quite good at it. Or so I thought haha...
2021-10-31 Joined France
No problem :)
ch 0 1 The Beginning of the Story
Sci-fi · Tampan_Berani
The prologue is interesting in itself but the writing quality is poor. You should make more space between sentences so that we don't get massive paragraph to read (think of phone readers too). Also, you should inform yourself about basic writing skills like the difference between Showing and Telling so that you know when both are efficient (which wasn't the case in your first chapter). It is the first chapter so I'm not going to make a review but I hope that you'll improve while writing. Good luck for your work author (I'm sadly going to stop here)
ch 0 1 The Beginning of the Story
Sci-fi · Tampan_Berani
Not going to lie : I was scared as f
ch 0 1 Update [IMPORTANT]
Fantasy · CasualNaphu
What about his sister though 🤔
"Do not touch me!" Riley screamed, his eyes reflecting the ball of fire that was hovering on Scarlet Mage's left palm, "No one is allowed to touch me!"
Urban · Romeru
Amazing review! Just be aware to not rush your chapters, think of the satisfaction it provides you and your readers (I guess) to read well-written chapters. I'll try your book when I have time to spare ;)
The Arcadia System
Fantasy · Purple_Khaos