Webnovel Author: Masta12 - Fanfic Collection

—And he even dares to say that there was something wrong with her thingking! Hahaha so hilarious really! this guy is hitting my nerves! Jeanette was reincarnated at the same time as him. She was a daughter of a famous blacksmith, learn blacksmithing at such a young age, and when she turns ten, she left thier home. Few years later after that, she brainwash the king of the country and made him announce her as a Heir, several months after that she made the king died. She become the new ruler of the country, mind controlled most of the nobles and official and such, in my opinion it was very astounding. Yet this guy! billy or so whatever, think that there was something wrong with her?

like the plot, world building and writing quality. the only complain I had is his character. why? it started well, he act mature, he had plans, he was hard worker, he used his head, he was smart, but somehow he become moron after marrying. And then there was a point where he easily trust an oldman who used to be a master of Manuel( the one who tried assassinate him). Like really that's sucks! trusting just because Jean (the state lord) told him that he had a good character? I trust him to the point you revealed to him your secret passage without a second thought, and somehow, probably because of some plot armor that the author tweaks, it turns out fine. And there was this part where he met Janette (a reincarnator like him) and he was like, 'why are you doing this?' 'respect your elders!' 'you should use your powers in good!' like what the hell? this guy, was good at first, cautious, smart, rational, but as the story goes, he turns into goody goody guy who talks about morality shits! Anyway, Im done, this isnt type.

The story was good, I can tell that the author had done his research well. The plot was good, story development, other than slow paced and so so, I was satisfied with. The only thing I complained is the MCs personality. Like really, I understand he's a modern man, virgin and such but why in the fucking hell he was so simp? He had a heart and mind of conqueror, willing to sacrifice everything for great benefits, which is a mind set I love. But the way, he act with his lovers contradict it. No he was no pussy, I just found it unrealistic at how he spoiled them, how he give them everything, treat them romantically and such and they, in return love him back, loyally... though it sounds good and amazing, reality doesn't work like that. He was handsome, charming, charismatic, prideful, ambitious, perfect, good man etc., They might be willing to share him to others, but that doesn't mean they will love him unconditionally, loyally. No, theres no such a thing, even if we were to apply the midieval culture such a thing is wish fullfillment. What he need is to exert domination, manipulation, and at some degree corruption. Though it sounds sick, Its more realistic than how the MC did.

i dont get it. He was NTR'd, died and reincarnated to the past, he was supposed to get revenge and such blah blah, but suddenly, he change his mind after he realized that it was petty. I only read chapter 40 yet, I felt confused already. I mean, whats the point of reincarnation? is he the MC? or the girl? or both cuz they both reincarnated? It started great really, but after pulling some plot twist such as 'evil god mannipulating them' it sucks.. Adding and giving him some buffs, epic treasures, items, reputations and such wasnt bad but giving him everything was plain boring.

the idea was good, character designs and interactions, world building, and such, the only complain I had is the way he act. Like really, sure hydra torture him to death in order to get his power and it was reasonable for him to hate them, but kill them? erase them? Why bother if he knew, as a Marvel fan that Captain America and Avengers will deal them later on. Another thing that I think stupid is the way he acted a father. Not gonna elaborate how stupid it was, all I can say is, it was so cringe, that I wanted to vomit. I dont have a problem on the way he Involved himself to the plot. I understand that the author wanted to give him exposure, but can you please made him a bit more smarter. He was like stupid idiot telling everyone his background, kidnapped by Hydra, torture to death in order to gain his powers blah blah blah, so he wanted to wipe them off from the earth becauze they are evil organization blah blah blah Really? this isn't your universe, can u act more rationally, from what I CAN SEE, the author portrayed you as non hero character, but the way you act, the way think is very hero-like. As if it was you're obligation to save someone or solve problems

thanks