Webnovel Author: fat_gamer - Novel Collection

Yes, but it'll be later when he is older

The premise is quite interesting and the tone made me chuckle a couple of times. Definitely an interesting read and a story with potential. I hope you keep writing!

Thanks for sharing your opinions. While I agree that the majority of childhood arcs fall flat, I will try my best to make it exciting to read. I intend to have Nick heal and find his core through this arc, as such it is quite important to the story. I hope you continue to stick with it and enjoy reading it!

Thanks a lot for your review! Could you elaborate on what you mean by rhythm? Since Nick is just 10 years old, he cannot play professionally until at least the age of 15. I do plan to have him be a part of a youth academy where aspiring football players gather if that's what you are referring to. Again, thanks a lot for the review! And hope you continue enjoying this story!

Your writing is easy to read and flows very smoothly. The action scenes are definitely a huge strength as it felt very impactful. While the premise and genre are quite common, your decision to take things slow might result a well polished story. I loved the pacing in the first few chapters. Some advice from me would be attempt a more show don't tell approach. This could be through the thoughts of the MC, or dialogue since omnipotent narrator kills the sense of immersion. Also, revisiting your chapters after you're done writing them a few hours to a day later will help you spot mistakes easily. Overall, a pleasant read and keep posting

Thanks for the in depth review. You have provided a lot for me learn about

If you stare into the abyss, the abyss stares back. I believe all of us have an abyss inside us. We need to be mindful of the abyss inside all of us. Therefore, our Lord and Savior Jesus Christ is truly the shining beacon of light for us lambs /s

Thanks for the review!

Thanks for the glowing review, I will definitely try to improve on the shortcomings. Thanks for the review

Thanks a lot for your review. I'm definitely going to add a prologue to give a sense of where my story is going. Thanks a lot for the suggestion

The story has an interesting premise as it would help it stand out in quite a saturated genre. Adding a prologue is quite useful as a hook (I'm going to steal the idea hehe). As another review has mentioned, working on your grammar and punctuation would help the readability of the story. Just spacing the paragraphs correctly will be helpful in it being easy on the eyes. Try to move the story forward with dialogue or at least inner thoughts instead of pure narration. For example, in the first 2 chapters, instead of the MC narrating his own personality and character, it's more enjoyable for the reader if they make those inferences through dialogue or story. You can use sites like grammarly or other AI powered tools to help make your story more readable, this would also help you understand and learn faster . TLDR; great potential, could use better english

This is the shameless author review I saw everyone doing 😅 I don't really have anything to say other than I hope you guys enjoy reading this