- 0 d Continuous Writing
- 743.1 h of Reading
- 656 Read books
Cetotris
LV 13Just a simple internet addict, using the time to read and write stories. You can also find me on Wattpad: @Cetotris
2022-01-26 Joined GlobalBadges 12
Moments 27
I mean, you have a point. But it’s not that bad, we are still reading it after all. If you want to remake it, here are some ideas. Make the colour drain smaller. Like only one country sized. Wait a year after the quirk accident to let her be kidnapped. Or else, it would be suspicious. Her kidnappers think they kidnapped a 4/5 year old, they will either try to be nice or give her pain when she doesn’t listen for the loyalty. And she will likely have a direct ‘parent’ for that, since she is too young to be by herself. As I said, she is 4/5. Even if she had a powerful quirk, she would never be allowed a choice or meet anyone important. As for character development, mc might get a bit more childish over the years, because she can act like a child and it is normal and after the kidnapping turn colder. I’m not quite sure in which direction you wanted to bring the story, but I’m sure it will be good. I personally would have continued reading and If even if you drop or remake it, I hope you still have fun writing things. Btw, don’t worry. I had the same problem with my first story.
This book has been deleted.
Idk compared to experience the torture that is 8mprel down, maybe death is merciful. Well if you ignore that they could escape in a few months time thanks to Luffy.
I remember being a bit more... Lenient with others.
One Piece: Reborn as Enel
Anime & Comics · VeganMaster
You‘re right, but I think there would be more than enough people that stopped when they were strong enough and settled down by making money through teaching or medicine. Though their village was certainlytoo small to have someone like that.
This paragraph has been deleted.
Immortal Ice Empress: Path to Vengeance
Fantasy · Dreyerboys
I don’t really think that’s much of a problem considering that medicine should be quite advanced with the help of cultivators, which significantly reduces chances of dying that early as most cases of death were illness or war at that time.
This paragraph has been deleted.
Immortal Ice Empress: Path to Vengeance
Fantasy · Dreyerboys
With a small smile, Ito slowly took out a scroll and with a small puff, white smoke escaped into the surroundings as a 2nd him appeared.
Kunoichi of Iwagakure
Anime & Comics · Cetotris
It was a puppet that looked very lifelike and could even pass as Kurai's twin because of their great resemblance, with only some things like hair color and clothing being different.
Kunoichi of Iwagakure
Anime & Comics · Cetotris
I think, that this is the most fitting soundtrack for this scene.
Yeah, I’m not so sure about that either now.
Since it is like this, I will probably skip through those 3 years in a single, short, chapter before getting to the war arc. Before that, however, I have a plan to make at least one more important story part directly after they return home. I have not decided which ending to choose but it will likely be different than the original one.
Kunoichi of Iwagakure
Anime & Comics · Cetotris
Katsudon
"One serving of Ebi fries, and one Katsudon for table 2!" Yelled Nozomi towards the kitchen, where Yui and Pakura were crazily trying to keep up with the massive amounts of orders.
Kunoichi of Iwagakure
Anime & Comics · Cetotris
Ebi fries
"One serving of Ebi fries, and one Katsudon for table 2!" Yelled Nozomi towards the kitchen, where Yui and Pakura were crazily trying to keep up with the massive amounts of orders.
Kunoichi of Iwagakure
Anime & Comics · Cetotris
Oh yeah, my bad. I forgot to put it up since I had it on Wattpad already. It’s up now.
Picture: (I tried my best, alright.. . This was taken when she was with Team Minato, minus the obvious Iwa features.)
Kunoichi of Iwagakure
Anime & Comics · Cetotris
Picture: (I tried my best, alright.. . This was taken when she was with Team Minato, minus the obvious Iwa features.)
Kunoichi of Iwagakure
Anime & Comics · Cetotris
Did I? While I did write about the battle and how I think it would have approximately turned out, I did write it based of the limited information from my research. It basically said on the naruto-fandom, that Shoyo was defeated because of the particle style and Onoki had to retreat due to him being exhausted. I did take a lot of references from that, including Shoyos last words and his abities. Though I was also surprised to find out, that there was ANOTHER one that could use senjutsu from Konoha .
ch 0 3 Ch3- Team Shōyo and the battle in the Land of Mountains
Kunoichi of Iwagakure
Anime & Comics · Cetotris
That would make it just more interesting. I mean, if you’ve never seen a phone, wouldn’t you be even more curious about it. And it honestly doesn’t matter, you would buy yourself a Gameboy if there is that one unique game that you can’tget anywhere else.
to help me with establishing a foothold in this galaxy. With that I started to work on my first product which was going to be a phone that would be mostly geared towards gaming. The phone would have multiple games already installed onto it when I released it and over time more would be released.
Dropped Sorry :( =*=¥=*=
Sci-fi · Greg112300
I understand the need for it, but it's still a huge information dump. Anyway, I enjoy reading this so far, keep it up.l
ch 0 5 Bounties, Fame and Experience point conversion
Kan-Gar-Chu! (Edited One Piece FanFic)
Anime & Comics · dancematdan
I'll try but realistically speaking it will probably be around a 5/10.
I hope you wont mind a break after that, where I can write on something else, while stocking up on some Chapters here.
Puppet's leash
Fantasy · Cetotris
Thank you for the increadible story. While it is unfortunate that we won’t get to read the newer arcs, it is also understandable.
ch 347 Chapter 347: Epilogue
One Piece: Reincarnated as Vivi
Anime & Comics · Krio_Genix