I create and translate novels and share them with people like me who just love novels with a passion. I hope to gain experience and publish my own novel someday. Patreon - www.patreon.com/Sniperwoof
2022-01-29 Joined Global
Maybe it has something to do with the S Cells as well? Goku wasn't a Super Saiyan when Gohan was born, but he had achieved SSJ and had plenty of S Cells when Goten was conceived.
ch 0 6 Using Ultra Instinct - Awakened
Anime & Comics · Sniperwoof
No, since he is a Saiyan Hybrid. Both he and Trunks were born without a tail.
ch 0 6 Using Ultra Instinct - Awakened
Anime & Comics · Sniperwoof
Do this. After you've finished writing, open your note app and copy/paste the chapter you've written there. Then, select the Grammarly keyboard and you'll find that it's giving you suggestions for things you need to change. Just click on that and let it change the words according to it's suggestions and see if that feels better than the original. That help a lot. And if all of that also doesn't help with the grammar, just use AI to correct the chapter grammatically. Also, these kind of novels should be written in 3rd person PoV not the First person. Explaining your actions while doing or performing an act feels a bit weird to read. Doing these will definite improve the overall novel quality. Thanks.
ch 0 1 Chapter 1- Beginnings
Celebrities · SMMCLIPS
Use a grammar app. It'll help with the reading quality. There are no structure in the sentences or paragraphs, besides the other grammatical mistakes. Using something like Grammarly will help a lot. It's free.
ch 0 1 Chapter 1- Beginnings
Celebrities · SMMCLIPS
Are you stupid or what? He's not calling Allah 'Yahweh'. Yahweh is a seperate God, the god of the Israelites. Nobody is calling Allah 'Yahweh' so stop crying about it. He literally said 'and the like'. It's simple English, not even that complicated. What are you even on about?
"Hello, wandering soul. I am called God, Yahweh, Allah, and many other names of the like. You have been chosen to be reincarnated. You can either choose which world or let me choose for you, though the world you just came from is not an option," the giant white orb spoke to me as if its voice came from all directions at once and in my mind.
Anime & Comics · Anomander_Adaar
To the Muslim's above. Please try to understand that he's just stating this in general and trying to be inclusive. You don't have to take this personally and make this about yourself. There are other religions as well, apart from Islam, and those religions have their own gods that they believe in. Trying to argue about One True God or whose belief is correct is pointless because everyone is entitled to their own beliefs and you believing/thinking otherwise doesn't change a thing or make other's belief wrong. Also, I just request everybody, regardless of their religion, to please be respectful and inclusive of others and not impose their beliefs on anyone else. Thank You.
"Hello, wandering soul. I am called God, Yahweh, Allah, and many other names of the like. You have been chosen to be reincarnated. You can either choose which world or let me choose for you, though the world you just came from is not an option," the giant white orb spoke to me as if its voice came from all directions at once and in my mind.
Anime & Comics · Anomander_Adaar
He's not writing this for Muslims specifically. He's saying that in general. There are other religions out there as well, you know? Those with other Gods they worship? So stop expecting to him to make it exclusive to your religion and ignoring everybody else's.
"Hello, wandering soul. I am called God, Yahweh, Allah, and many other names of the like. You have been chosen to be reincarnated. You can either choose which world or let me choose for you, though the world you just came from is not an option," the giant white orb spoke to me as if its voice came from all directions at once and in my mind.
Anime & Comics · Anomander_Adaar
This is lazy writing. What do you mean by Gust, Whirlwind, etc? You can atleast state the Pokemon moves can't you?
ch 11 Chapter 11: Evolution, Capture Pidegeotto!
Anime & Comics · stromerthaha
Bro, ypu don't use any 'comma' or any other stuff. You just keep the paragraph going and it feels really weird to read. How is it different from MTL?
ch 0 2 Chapter 2: First Battle, Equip light ball and journey begins.
Anime & Comics · stromerthaha
Are you sure you rewrote this? This still feels like MTL to me. The grammer is really bad.
ch 0 1 Reborn as Ash Ketchum, Thunder God Pikachu
Anime & Comics · stromerthaha
Is he stupid or something? Why is he talking to himself? Can't he talk?
'How dare you judge me after all I have done?'
Fantasy · TheDragonSlayer
Good. Add some of his teammates reactions and comments too instead of just stating that he knew what they said. It'll make it better. I had one more suggestion, but it's up to you to decide as you're the one writing the story. I just feel like the story will fell better in 3rd person perspective instead of the 1st Person.
ch 51 Merry Christmas You Filthy Animals
Action · Cujo
More basketball would be good. Even if it's not like the playoffs, at least more than what is currently shown. A bit of perspectives/commentary/reaction is fine, but a little more game would be really good.
ch 50 Rapid Progress
Action · Cujo
I just have one suggestion to improve the story. I've noticed that recently, the fillers are increasing more and more while the actual game is over within a few paragraphs and Pov's. You're not showing the game anymore. Just saying what happened during the game. This doesn't help with the visualization and decrease the reading quality of an otherwise good novel.
ch 45 Spurs vs Lakers
Action · Cujo
Don't do the AOE one. That will be over the top.
Also, Pack opening coming up soon! Let me know some skills you'd like to see and what rarity you'd think they would be at. These skills can involve passing, defending, possibly support skills as well such as an aoe buff to his teammates and many more!
Action · Cujo
Just a small constructive Criticism. Stop making it so dramatic all the time. You use words like determination, unyielding, and the like too much. It doesn't feel natural. Otherwise, you're doing good.
ch 25 AAU Tournament Finals: LSB Vs TTE (2 in 1)
Action · Cujo
To be honest, I wasn't aware of it until recently, but that version was abandoned and there were some potholes that it didn't change and kept the same from the original version, which I obviously wish to ammend.
ch 0 1 Starting Pack - Ultra Instinct
Transmigrated as Goten: Start Bonus - Ultra Instinct
Anime & Comics · Sniperwoof