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If you're going to describe a character, add a comma. For example... Jonathan Preston, the ex-FSU... You feel me?
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Sci-fi · MansonFD7
Also it's "a lab leak", to lessen confusion with the grammar.
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Sci-fi · MansonFD7
Make it a bit more formal by saying "one" instead of 1, depending on the statement.
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Sci-fi · MansonFD7
Make sure the 'titled' "Scorching Virus" has capital letters in the first character of the two words. So it won't confuse the readers.
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Sci-fi · MansonFD7
*that can make the human body burn It's not a past statement, so it should be burn, and not burnt. Because it's in present statement.
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Sci-fi · MansonFD7
It should be "Blood for blood, kin for kin" add a coma. If you want you can always go check out Punctuation Checker when manually editing. It works better than Grammarly, just click look up than deep look up. It's very simple yet the most useful.
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Eastern · ArkAnghel
HAHAHAHAHAHAHHA
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Fantasy · KleiNightwriter
LMAO THERE ARE PLENTY MORE PLOT TWISTS YOU WONT EXPECT THE MORE YOU READ XD
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Fantasy · KleiNightwriter
ikr ?
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Fantasy · KleiNightwriter
I'm sorry if it sounds cringy :sob:
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Fantasy · KleiNightwriter
It's pretty good! Although, despite the fact that it has a lot of information of what's going on, there is little to no description of how readers can visualize it. You have to balance between informing and describing the scene. The grammar and punctuation is almost perfect. But it has no imagination. You have to imagine and visualize what's happening in the novel like a movie and describe as much as you can on what you see on what is going around it. And make it sound poetic too. Describing the character's clothing, the setting, the time and date, the character's actions and adding details on what they are doing, and needs a bit more dialouge than just merely information of sentences. A novel isn't a novel without describing what it looks like than just informing. I hope this helps!
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You said you're a newbie writer.... how ate you this good?! its so shocking that you write so much better than me!! the grammar is perfect and everything is polished the vocabulary and use of words are fantastic! Mei my love you did a great job you make me proud! love you!
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Urban · Amaia_Sy
*Got into a fight Not get, the grammar matters when it comes to statements of context.
"Deandra Atma Wijaya. You are accused of being the mastermind behind the murder of your own parents. That night on the twelfth of November, you came home from a friend's house. Get into a fight with your parents. You then entered your father's room without permission and took a firearm from the bedroom drawer. Then shoot your mother in the chest three times. Your father tried to stop you by trying to grab the gun, but ended up getting two shots in the head and chest. Then you decide to call the police out of panic and fear. With so much evidence against you, I hereby demand Fifteen Years in prison for murder."
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Fantasy · Ibn_Zhaf