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Wyvern550
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Commented Lil comma here 'I'm a god, my son'
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Commented This bits a little unclear. Maybe try 'the light pointed directly towards him' ?
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Commented *pierced, because you use the word after
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Commented I AM PROUD OF YOU AS WELL FENRIR
He was taking his job seriously. I couldn't be more proud of him.
The Archives Of A Summoner
Fantasy · MWse
1yr
Commented Oooh I love this paragraph
When it came to my personal life, I was the family's black sheep. I wasn't mistreated, or at the very least, I wasn't shown that I had been. During a typical day, my primary responsibility was ironically to see after the 6 sheep we kept for milk, meat, and fur.
The Archives Of A Summoner
Fantasy · MWse
This line is good, but punctuation needs adding "We can't help! We're restricted to help or interrupt (I might change interrupt to interfere but you do you) in the world." The woman explained, whimpering.
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