Webnovel Author: Arc_Dragon - Fanfic Collection

The MC is too much stupid and too doo gooder .Yes author qill say who cares and dada but when a 2 year old does this nonsense I don't know which world ypu are in it will be difficult .He doesnot have anything to protect himself and he is 2 years old .He is just putting Target in his back .Yes warning parents is fine.He cpuld go other way like he had seen nightnares of them dying in poison like that .I Find it very ridiculous that if he is from modern world and Watched Naruto many times that still he dows this and the fuck is whitebeard route .He is just acting like adult . Author will bash me , I know this kind of authors .so I don't care . A fanfic is fanfic but atleast make it believable in sense of even Anime wold. Sakumo comming to Kill .what nonsense.An anbu cannot stop Sakumo. He is not Naive he is oversmart .A two year old cant fo anything he says even in Naruto world .

Well I type fast and didnot re-read it as I felt I have written too long

I just want to ask the Author .Do you make Kudhina End up with Minato ? Still with the seal? .I also is he not buttler than maid? .The other thing is even this is Naruto world why is a four year old doing chores and stuff like? Even when Mito takes him? I liked the other version but there are somethings that made me feel "hmmm thats starnge yeah no " .I mean I still enjoyed it as much as I can . And I hope you change somethings if you are rewriting Also the chakra thing.Please research I mean you can retort saying its just a fanfic but 1000 for Jubi then 750 is way to much .You should know what Jubi as pointed out . Even Hashirama And Madar donot have that much .You should check some Naruto facts .Many things are inaccurate . I would review after more chapters as It still can go from very great start to massive dissapointment .

It is a decent start .I am just little picky person so I do have problems here lile in first chapter we don't know what he is lord of and where he is accept the North and it feels little too fast paced . It would be better if you explain qhere he is in detail and also about his systsm and what timeline he is in. ( may be in auxillary chapters) but It will be better as just diving in head straight doesnot make me feel right .Though it is still behinning and I know that you will improve so not too harsh from me .

I am smoking webnovel and suffering from MTL hatism why ?

The stpry is good but I will be honest It feels like too much in one fanfic .You should have stayed within Marvel and do Emtertaient system there .Marbel itself is vwry big and make it Marvel Multiverse.I get ypu are a fan but mixing everything in one is not good .If you wamt to write a fanfic of Him traveling to the franchises then do another famfic where he travels to the franchises or just make famfic of his franchises while involving him like spinoff . You are introfucing too many things in one story that will only result in it being a catastrophie .The Entertainment part is like a footnote here as it gets never mentioned only how many IPS he got not even public reaction and leading to it ..and also with DC comics and all I mean his father works there and he didnot publish there .Shouldnot there be anything ? Like company pressuring or having Problems with Marc? . And Making a 10 year old write this much is insane .He is not robot .Make it more believable . Also Desvribe the full timeline amd his family bavkground fully well. There are lot of mess . If ypu improve I may remove this review but I am dissapointed the way its going. Do Better. Nothing is detailed and ypu again upgrade a system ? We havent even seen full capabilities and work of system . This is not emtertainemnt system its misleading .. It only shows IP collections nothing else .

?? Are you reading your own replies? I sas? What'ts the reply suppose to mean?. I said you didnot even bother to change minor mistakes and just copy pasted it . Did you not see that you pasted Tian Tian instead of Ten Ten , Xao Li instead of Rock lee? Or do you not understand what I said ? What you mean No thank you ? What foolish peaople these days.

I won't badmputh this even If I don't like the work .You clearly need to research more about Naruto or Just watch it or read it .I mean yes you said there will be plot holes but there are many things that you skipped over and if you want to do AU thing be my guest its not a bad idea but there are somethings that feels like nonsence even if we think from Naruto Anime Prospective.Also take inspirations from other stories not just make it lazy writing like putting MC on team 7 because they found no idea .Its bad The problem is in your knowledge and execution otherwise this could have been fantastic fanfic .Even from wish fullfilment point of view this story feels weird and just no offence There IS NO STORY NO DIRECTION

And the thing about Magneto?

It feels like just copy paste MTl I mean Not even changing names? Tiantian ,2nd Generation these types are all from MTL not a single thing changed?.These things may seem small but these things make the story distant .

Really? Where did Nara clan go ? The story is good but Its like story of rip off Nara clan nothing more like affinity with sahdows really ?.. Are you not aware of Nara clan to make this too similar to their powers ?

I just want to tell you something pal.I got your back.This is amazing I have been searching for crossover between two franchises .There was one but its Minor .I wanted to write Myself but I am a trashy author and cannot dedicate to much time on that .I love the beginning although there are some mistakes but you will improve over time. I just cant imahine what interactions will be like too lany possibilities .