so I'm sort of sailing on this sea called life with a destination in mind but no idea how to get there, I just hope these heavy expectations don't sink my ship....⛵⚓🚢
I think you should let loose more, and really work on the dialogues. The dialogues are average at best and the world building needs work too. You haven't also explained the power systems. And the relationship between omed and like is just Jim eating omeds food and washing the plates. You should work on that more.
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I think you should let loose more, and really work on the dialogues. The dialogues are average at best and the world building needs work too. You haven't also explained the power systems. And the relationship between omed and like is just Jim eating omeds food and washing the plates. You should work on that more.
Reincarnation Of An All-Rounder
Fantasy · UrekSenpa1