Bad move, me and probably nobody cares about this dude or will, and future fights with him Ahhrr... I'm here for the mc descovering his world not death chances that are not real or an ancient poor dude that can fuc7 himself for all i care. Don't get me wrong, your story is good, i'm just complaining.
ch 79 Sovereign: The Possessed Sword
Eastern · DD_TheDreamer
Come on, upload a new chapter bro, 17 days!!
ch 69 No more drinks for you
Fantasy · Pages_47
Same.
ch 18 Chapter 18
Anime & Comics · Hell_Dragon_Azavok
Author, how do you intend to make sure your main character doesn't die immediately when he arrives in the Gene Universe? Han Sen had the cat with nine lives tattoo for this, do you intend to make him steal Han Sen's pendant? And why isn't Jinag Chen trying to get closer to Han Sen? If he is Han Sen's friend, he would naturally take him to the Gene Universe at some point and support him however he can, what is your plan? Antagonize the protagonist at all times and steal everything he owns just because?
ch 18 Chapter 18
Anime & Comics · Hell_Dragon_Azavok
I'm talking about the 1, 2 and 3 before the rewriting and this one.
You should delete this chapter
ch 38 Not a chapter (Sorry)
Anime & Comics · Itsame_Mario
Well, the way the sentences connect and communicate with each other in your writing is hmm... clumsy? Would that be the right word? I can get the general meaning and where the text is going, but it takes some effort. Example: He is going to buy a shirt, but it would be red, not green because it stains. That's how I feel reading your writing, I understand, but there's a lack of information, such as where he went, what store, what type of shirt, price, size, among others.
ch 0 4 Arriving
Video Games · Serenity_Blades
Did you use AI to write this? Só confusing...
ch 0 4 Arriving
Video Games · Serenity_Blades
Synchronized!!
ch 25 Theo staring at the two moons
Fantasy · Pages_47
Cute.
ch 0 4 Their First Vow
Fantasy · Pages_47
I can't stand his name, Smarus sounds like a sneeze to me, like: "Ah~ ah~ ah~ SSMMAAARUUUSSS!!!!" Smarus Drangonborne, yes, of course~, his last name is Dragonborne for sure... Sneeze Dragonborn- No! Dragon Sneeze!! Yes, that's his name!!
ch 0 1 Chapter 1- Unfortunate Ending
Fantasy · DrFantasy
Saitama's power is based on his desire, when someone breaks the limiter their desire changes the individual (it could be their personality or inclination), if you get out of control well...monstrification. In Saitama's case, he didn't break his limiter immediately, but he broke it with his effort, little by little, all based on his childhood desire of wanting to be a hero who destroys all the monsters with one punch (basically being the strongest), when he really broke the limiter was when he tried to see the back of his head in the mirror because of the recent hair loss he had noticed, by doing this he moved faster than light after countless attempts, that's when his hair was gone along with its limiter, everything is based on what an individual wants for themselves in One Punch Man.
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Why "bald strong" man lol, one punch man in any lenguage seem pretty simple.
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I still don't understand why he didn't add human DNA to the mix, I know it wouldn't be the strongest, but as he wants to be as human as possible this DNA would at least provide a solid basis for the form he so desires.
ch 11 Chapter 10. Chitin and muscles
Video Games · Daoist914802
Bro, I understand the anger against the Batarians, but killing children... That's too much, no matter who they are, they have a cultural problem and without changing the culture or restricting them harshly there is no way to change them, maybe that make them worse, but still bro, that was a bit too brutal, all races deserve to live, even the Batarians, as much as I don't like them. You don't need to save them from the meteor in ME2, but at least don't drive them to extinction, that's very cruel, close to being extinct is okay, as they will be forced to change their slave culture to survive or the other races in the galaxy would destroy them.
ch 0 6 Chapter 5. The Taste of Blood
Video Games · Daoist914802
The problem with first-person points of view is that while the character narrates or if there is a general explanation involving the character's state, ability, mentality, etc. his or her will always seem out of place because this is something that takes place in a third-person narration. So having the character cohesively narrate something he shouldn't seem strange and out of place.
ch 0 4 Twisted
The Legend Of The Dark Demigoddess
Fantasy · San_Martins