shanekenoau

1yr

Commented

Good chaoter, but the pacing is a bit too jarring, should stop skimping on the plot and reduce the writing of the status screen, it would be better

ch 24 22 Not a Dream Part 1

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Sci-fi · agnozan

shanekenoau

2yr

Commented

seeing the future be like:

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Among the best realistic scifi ive ever read, how the story moves, the filler (fluff-potential) chapters with the female lead, the scientific and technological details, the world itself, wow just amazing...really recommended thank you author for bringing this piece of literature to life.

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Sci-fi · agnozan

shanekenoau

2yr

Commented

I relly like the zombie+robot monster..if only there's art to this cjp it would be amazing

ch 16 15 Code Red Part 3

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Sci-fi · agnozan

shanekenoau

2yr

Commented

wow amazing chp, but maybe should brush up on the wordings a bit, because some sentences sounded a bit off? anyway this is a good chp and i hope all the best for you

ch 14 13 Code Red Part 1

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Sci-fi · agnozan

shanekenoau

2yr

Commented

Uhm, can the author write more detailed info about fl? her description was very vague apart from her appearance...tell us abt her age, we want to know how legal is she, for research purposes...in addition please describe more about where this conversation between the two happened? only in the last line it was briefly mentioned...

ch 11 11 The Moment She Lost Her Marbles