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this writing is horrible there is little to no information or background of the world and events/chapters will suddenly be cut off and feel like a whole chapters was skipped

honestly I don't Evan know where to start I couldn't continue passed chapter 40 before i drop this the main character is litterly handed everything yet follows his dick instead of his brain he can litterly power up at any time but he is so lazy that instead of increasing his power he flirts with his family almost all of the 40 chapters i read are the mc flirting and thinking with his dick he Evan knowingly starts a fight with powerful people yet is to lazy to power up and just waits for it to be gifted or takes 4 hours to suddenly power up just enough to be lazy again

love the concept and so far the story is intreresting

has ntr and not free use already talks about paying resources for other that are not family

stopped at chaper 41 was ok till you upgraded the system the lust system seems more like a liability then an actual blessing dude had 12 million points and the list system stole all of it to add to that the upgrade dident help you it hurt you it demands you do things or it will cripple you (such as takeing your dick of changing your gender to female) and it took away your easy points that were not much but still worth 1bronze coin each and honestly the messed up part is you could have had a better system ( tho you could argue that they would become trash later to) at this point I'd sell the lust system to the store and focus on the store not the lust system maybe Evan try to buy a system that helps gather coins for you store system

so I like the story and the concept but your character development is plain awful the mc changes completely without any warning at all he went from a loveing protective guy to a perv rapest who litterly gang rapes a girl with his clones but then acts like being in a relationship with his cousin would be the sickest thing he has ever heard like if your going to make ppl care with the mc quit making his personality jump all over the place another instance the mc litterly kills himself and dies multiple times without fear yet he nearly pissed himself when he got was about to get caught spying on a couple haveing sex little late to make him act childish when you made him rape and kill himself

so I couldn't get past chapter 10 before I dropped it starts of books usually involves introducing the mc and his personality this one you seem to get tossed into the middle of the story without much of any information the mc personality seems only bored and disconnected and instead of bringing more life to your mc you get other ppls pov also maybe my own dislike idk but when you continue to use anime as a reference to often your Lossing quality not everyone knows what anime your talking about and lastly the skipping in the first 10 chapters is not good skips are useally used to pass large amount of useless info useally to power up the mc but to do that at the start of the book when you need the info dump the most now you just got a bored mc that no one knows anything about other than he is bored and disconnected from his new world only thing I like about the story is the concept of the system

could be much better I'm on chapter 41 and so far I can say half of it was meta data you can literally fill in 7 chapters with nothing but how much the mc eats the same could be said about his training and sadly can't be skipped because important bits are mixed in with the boring bits you could have gotten the same info just by putting he dose his usual routine every morning or skipping days in general

Grammer is bad and story is all over the place and adding to that there is a huge lack of information the mc is strong because he is strong how he got there dosent seem to say