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DaoistLORD_PARAGON

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I don't know how to write but i am very observant to silly mistakes so imma correct you if i find some and if your story is a disappointment not reaching my expectations I'll definitely abuse you

2022-05-18 Joined Nigeria

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It's still too exagegerated... adjust it

After that, he lived his days completely shut off from communicating with anyone, even the terrible nurses who treated him badly and verbally abused him, knowing he couldn't defend himself. It wasn't until one day a lifeline appeared in the form of his professor from the university he had previously attended.

Automaton Magi-Replica : In the new world with a robot creation system

Automaton Magi-Replica : In the new world with a robot creation system

Fantasy 路 Chronicle27

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Hmmm a possible omnipotent being making so many mistakes ?

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Eye Of Intent

Eye Of Intent

Eastern 路 ROYAL_SOUNDS

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Your writing skills needs improvement ,you should re write these pages later when you think your writing skill is good enough

they lid of the bin ripped off violently I looked up see my end before me and what I saw made my blood run cold. 5 meters tall, a white chitinous body with tan accents down its front and sides spikes decorated throughout, 4 legs each one ending with a sharp thick spike which could run a man through with ease a vertical torso with 2 scythe like appendages sharp enough clearly to cut through metal with no resistance, A head in a shape similar to a pentagon with small protrusions sticking out of the top in a row, teeth like ivory needles drenched in saliva and eyes black as void staring down into his own.

The hivemind is conquering for me?

The hivemind is conquering for me?

Sci-fi 路 Ben_Cresswell

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TF馃様

Veron stood stone still, he wouldn't miss the next words out of her mouth for anything. His entire new domain could be crumbling and yet he wouldn't care. He had to know what she was going to say, and damned be the consequences.

Birth of a World: The ascendancy games

Birth of a World: The ascendancy games

Sci-fi 路 Billy_Bunn_5040

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馃え馃

"Here is where you will make the core of your world. You will place your hands on the sphere whereupon the creation system will be bound to you, and you will be given access to all the features available to rank 1 gods. You will learn more about those ranks and their abilities later on, but for now just focus on building the world you want to make. Now remember, to this new world you ARE God. Set whatever rules you like, make things the way you want them to be. But be warned, the rules you make will bind you. God cannot break his own law."

Birth of a World: The ascendancy games

Birth of a World: The ascendancy games

Sci-fi 路 Billy_Bunn_5040

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Divine Contest

Divine Contest

Fantasy 路 Djeezer

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