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Hey o/ I’m a Story Writer and Reader, although I do some drawing and piano on the side. Currently writing a Web Novel. Interested? Here’s a link to our discord! https://discord.gg/tTvf4UZVpb

2022-05-31 Joined Australia

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Not bad, not bad at all. A good story that either stays away from cliches, or tackles them well! The storyline's been thought about before writing allowing for a stable, flowing story. Only real downsides I saw were that the writing could be improved, although it's getting better as the chapters go on -- and the stability of updates, as it seems a bit... random. Characters could use some more development, but they are written in a way you can attach to them.

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ch 0 7 Chapter Seven -- Bright Lights

Fate's Grasp

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Hey Acorn! Wew, big review 0-o Thanks for the detail, it's greatly appreciated! Let's get to the response then, shall we? World-Building: Thanks for the compliment of a solid story, assures a few doubts of mine ^^; Vague detail. I think I know what you mean, I'll try to make things a bit more clear in future chapters, although some parts are left vague intentionally~ Although if you wanted some specific terms/details cleared up then I'd be happy to explain! Also no, they won't be nomads, lol. Story: Lackluster Hopefully, things will get more interesting for you further on. Sadly I do agree somewhat, but the future is looking quite exciting! As you pointed out, this first bit was more of an introduction, but I promise things will get epic~ Just wait til the Magic System~ As with the CPH, I have been going decently low risk for this, as I'm new to this regular-chapter-releases-and-people-are-actually-reading-my-stuff, and wanted to ease myself into it, but I'll be moving onto more complex, exciting, and thus higher impact, higher risk writing as I find my sweet spot! As for the terms: Apologies for the confusion on them ^^; They'll get explained as things progress But as for the example you gave, your assumption is correct; Renvin is Rithveer's Magic System. E.g. '[Dominant Heart]. A Renvin spell...' I'll try to not have too many new terms left unexplained or unanswered if they break the flow. I can see how they'd break the flow, but I can't do it too suddenly, or briefly as that would create more problems and- Ah, ranting at this point, apologies. Grammer: Thanks for the compliment, again! If you found any issues then please report them, either in the report channel in the discord or Private Message me! Characters: Just to start: Assassins are sick aren't they :o Glad to hear the dialogue sounds good! It was one of my main worries- I'll stay, or attempt to, stay away from introducing characters that're only there for minor plot purposes, but I will say that all the major characters* shown so far will be quite important... ;P As for Aeryn & Lewis: They'll meet, don't worry about that~ I'm aiming for main characters that aren't completely overpowered, but strong; ones that compliment each other's weaknesses with their own strengths; ones that don't do everything because 'Justice is the only system to judge in life'; ones that aren't a binary 1 or 0. Main characters that you can feel, ones you can relate to, while still being distant in their own stories; caught up with their own problems, some of them being ones unique to a fantasy world, leaving your imagination to try and relate to them, to appeal to 'How would I tackle this problem?', and other's being problems anyone could've faced. I see character development as vital to a good story and I want my characters to reflect that as much as I can. Thanks for reading my TedTalk, lol. Hopefully I cleared a few things up and thanks again for the epic review! ^^

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