I am currently writing the novel, "The Extra's War."
2022-06-26 Joined India
馃憤
The idea ate at my mind as I continued forward. I had no choice but to move. Leon couldn't die... His death would mean that the likelihood of me getting exposed as a 'fraud' was almost guaranteed.聽
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Author, just a small suggestion, take this with a grain of salt, but I think Julien's reason here is a bit weak, as he is potentially sacrificing himself to save Leon to not look like a fraud, which seems a bit far-fetched.
The idea ate at my mind as I continued forward. I had no choice but to move. Leon couldn't die... His death would mean that the likelihood of me getting exposed as a 'fraud' was almost guaranteed.聽
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I think you meant, 'reliving the moment.'
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馃憤, keep up the good work.
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Author, beware of modern slang in an old-fashioned fantasy, for example, the word, 'Ya'll,' doesn't seem to fit the context.
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Vane's eyes during metamorphosis.
ch 0 3 Resilient Retreat (2)
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Granar approaches Vane.
ch 0 3 Resilient Retreat (2)
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The tree trunk is wider
ch 0 2 Resilient Retreat (1)
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3, imagine it being reinforced with wooden planks and rusting sheet metal
I saw a dark aggregate at the terminal鈥攖he door.
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2
Every step forced me to think again, my steps weighed down.
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1
The tunnel, layered with cobwebs and insects, emitted a putrid stench.
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6
So he embraced it and collided with the terminal, permeating through the bright white glow.
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5
One of the cracks was now widened by the entity; with his inky black arms, tearing open the holes in space, despite their resistance.
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4
The outline of the cracks was covered in a dense gradient of purple, blue, green, and red, and twinkling arose from beyond them.
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Thank you very much for the comment, I'll make sure to upload it regularly!
The Extra's War
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