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Hera_Crowley
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ch 0 8 Chapter 7
BlueDiamond
Urban · Hera_Crowley
did you mean to call the goblins different names? They are Gager and Garm in the other paragraph.
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The Mage Files
Urban · Eldritch_Umbra
This always happens corded land lines are menace to society
After a second of groping around, he picked it up and brought the phone to his ear quickly. The cord was caught on his desk lamp, and dragged it along with it. Unfortunately, this was the exact moment that the lamp reached the edge of the desk. The lamp slammed him square in the nose and then toppled off of the desk and hit the floor with a crash, the bulb shattering on impact.
The Mage Files
Urban · Eldritch_Umbra
take out had before made
Seeing the water had made me realize how thirsty I was. My mouth was dry as a desert. My body moved on impulse, reaching to drink the water even if it was dirty. My body crouched over the water, cupping my hands together to pour some of the water in my mouth.
Celestial Apocalypse
Fantasy · Sweet_Sui
facts I would be like how dare you!
"...What kind of question is that?"
Celestial Apocalypse
Fantasy · Sweet_Sui
c'mon
"Oh, cmon, be true to yourself. Look deep. Do you really think you're happy?"
Celestial Apocalypse
Fantasy · Sweet_Sui
take out and after chairs use a comma instead
A complete stranger of a woman suddenly appeared before me. We sat opposite of each other in wooden chairs and a wooden table between us. We made eye contact, I stared into her black endless eyes.
Celestial Apocalypse
Fantasy · Sweet_Sui
comma after better
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Celestial Apocalypse
Fantasy · Sweet_Sui
the second sentence is a bit odd. Maybe say I checked, listening for a heart beat. or just take out and changed listened to listening
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Celestial Apocalypse
Fantasy · Sweet_Sui
this line is so funny
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Celestial Apocalypse
Fantasy · Sweet_Sui
You don't need of after countless. countless portals
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Celestial Apocalypse
Fantasy · Sweet_Sui
check this one too
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BlueDiamond
Urban · Hera_Crowley
Let me know if this is better
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Urban · Hera_Crowley
I definitely have biases too
ch 16 Chapter 15
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Urban · Hera_Crowley