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It was a mistake. I changed it to (A+)-rank. Thank you for pointing that out.
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Pupil is the center of the eye, which the color surrounds. You can search it on google.
At that instant, my circular black pupils twisted into vertical slit pupils. My vision turned grey and everything around me became white and black. The only color was the glowing blood-red spots on the Gordon's body. His neck, his heart, his forehead, and many other areas of his body were releasing a blood-red glow.
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Arion is not the Earth. There is neither Indians nor Americans. As the author of this world, I created this world in a way that it's forbidden to invent the thing called meditating. Are you satisfied now? :) Thanks for reading!
I gulped down a low level mana recovery potion and sat down to meditate. I found out that mediating actually helped me replenish my mana faster. I already had some doubts about meditation increasing the rate of mana gathering when I first tried to use mana. But now that I was more familiar with mana, I realized meditating was really helping me recover my mana faster.
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You are right, I've made a logical mistake there. I will fix it now. Thank you.
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Not everyone meditates, only mc knows how to meditate because he learned it in his previous life. Meditating is not only way to clear up your mind and gather mana. You can gather mana even if you don't meditate, but that will be slower.
I gulped down a low level mana recovery potion and sat down to meditate. I found out that mediating actually helped me replenish my mana faster. I already had some doubts about meditation increasing the rate of mana gathering when I first tried to use mana. But now that I was more familiar with mana, I realized meditating was really helping me recover my mana faster.
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Well, both of our opinions make sense in a way. So I can't really say anything to change your opinion. If you can convince me somehow, I will gladly change how MC feels when he kills the goblins. (I didn't delete your comment, It's deleted automatically when I update the chapter. You can retype your comment if you want.)
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It's not like we take someone's life in our daily lives. So, I thought it wasn't something a person from our society could handle so easily, even if the life he took was a goblin's.
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You are right. It really is hard for a beginner like him to do these kind of things one after another. I was trying to create an enjoyable fight scene so I unintentionally dismissed this fact. Still, I think it was cool :) Thanks for your feedback.
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Can you tell me what you didn't understand? Is it about grammar? Or the scene itself? Or the choice of words? I will try to fix it if you tell me.
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I will get into details during the lessons of the academy. For now I just laid the foundations such as races, the mana, appearance of portals and dungeons, status screen (martial arts, spells etc.). It may be lacking but after a few chapters, I will focus on world building. Thanks for the feedback!
ch 13 Dungeon Expedition (1)
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I am not a native so sometimes I can't describe what I imagine in my mind. As a result, I do a lot of grammar mistakes and turn it into a really bad writing. I thought it was cool though. Anyway, thanks for reading and your kind feedback :) (Your comment was deleted because I made some correction on the paragraph. If you want, you can type it again.)
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*Fortunately, when I thought I would lose my 'mind'...
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I won't give him another OP martial art but I will keep your other ideas in mind. Thanks fro reading
ch 11 The Shadow Blade (2)
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Have a look at the chapter 7 where I talk about some 'rituals'. Thanks for reading!
Attribute (Element): Fire, Lighting
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I sometimes make corrections when I see wrongs. Apparently, when I update a chapter, all the paragraph comments of that chapter are deleted automatically. So your paragraph comments may have been deleted unintentionally. I will recheck the chapters a few times before I publish so that this won't happen again.
ch 0 9 The Slum (2)
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I have my finals this week which is why the uploads are so irregular. I will slowly increase the number of chapters per week after the finals. Thanks for your support btw.
ch 23 The Plan Ahead (2)
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