Webnovel Author: Adnan_1 - Novel Collection

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Is it me or is there a chapter missing (chapter 2) ?

Sometimes I ask myself if the author ever thinks before they write their story. Many things defy logic, and what's with the new trend of authors making their main characters significantly taller than their actual age?

I'm not a fan of leaving bad reviews, but in this fanfiction, there are too many things that suggest the author has only read or watched a few Naruto episodes or maybe other fanfics. Too many aspects are incorrect (like a 2-year-old creating new fuinjutsu without asking for talent for it and even though that guy might be the talentest talent ever it's a little to much; the portrayal of Hiruzen's character; and the background of the story). I understand that in a fanfic, the author is free to do whatever they want, but there's a limit. Please correct me if I'm wrong, but in this kind of fanfic, what makes it interesting is how the addition of characters changes what we already know, not manipulating the story entirely.

I will list the many problems I encountered with this fanfiction, focusing on the redundant points present in the first four chapters. This should be enough to give you an idea of the kind of story it is: 1. Incredibly stupid main character: From the very first sentence, the main character claims that there is a higher chance of finding life forms inland than on the coast, and decides to head inland. (Advice: if you are ever lost, do NOT do what he does!) The funniest thing is that the character is supposed to be an elite former military man. 2. Incoherent reincarnation: If the story takes place in a world where memories of the original world are erased, why choose the concept of reincarnation? And even if we accept it, why is it that ONLY the memories of the original world are erased? This makes the story unbearable to read. (Personally, I'm tired of seeing "Dark Sasuke" everywhere. It's like watching the adventures of a robot, it's boring.) 3. Unexplained information: Some characters seem to have unexplained information. For example, the guild leader of Cait Shelter knows that Wendy and the other dragon slayers are from 400 years ago, without any justification. Even if he knows that the dragons disappeared 400 years ago, there are other more plausible theories than time travel. These kinds of problems are omnipresent in the story. Frankly, I don't understand how it can be ranked so high (maybe because it's one of the few long Fairy Tail fanfictions on this site). That said, my opinion is personal and you are free to make your own.