Webnovel Author: PlagueMan - Novel Collection

It's honestly frustrating. The premise is good, the idea is solid but the execution is one of the worst I have ever seen. The way the story is flowing is literally brain dead however I can admit that I haven't finished the whole thing, the parts I have read are horrible. At first you would think it would be a DC oriented story about gaining power and expanding to the multi and later omniverse. But it really isn't, its a ploy for him to go to pacific rim and then other worlds while maybe years down the line go back to dc. *Spoilers kinda but not really, just a heads up* The story beats are horrendous, by that I mean. Him for some author'y bullshit reason having his dna be decoded in a matter of hours by some no names on pacific rim and then have them be able to literally instill his superpowers on even rodents mind you these arent only his superman powers individually which they did but also his multiverse transportation powers. Which means power transference and cloning, this doesn't bode well because some rando super duper "hot" science lady who is for some reason infatuated with his body will most likely be a love interest. Fun considering she mutilated him when he was unconscious The research to do all this took like a couple of hours in the book. It's all bullshit even after he woke up it didn't improve and from what I've gathered he won't return to dc for another hundred chapters. It's all meaningless filler with science that makes no sense whatsoever filling the lines, its not even the creative type of science fiction or understandable bullshit science its just purely wrong science. Reading what I did gave me a headache due to how infuriatingly bad the story was. I can't imagine the torture reading the rest of it would be. Honestly as a writer you should read your own story before you publish it and if you don't see how braincell killing it is there is something wrong. Sorry for harping on so harshly, I genuinely got a headache, felt sick and got angry due to how shit it was.

Sorry for misspellings, or rather use of wrong letters. New phone and Im not used to the keyboard as it is a different size from what Im used to.

It's well written and most everything in ot is interesting.The characters themselves feel fairly thought out and the world background is pretty well held together.Now I do have some problems with the novel, problems related to the romance first and foremost and the pace secondly.The pace while decent can get sluggish with chapters that are a pain to get through, but where the novel really is a shit show is the romance.The author should really wait until the mc is older to make romance work, mc is mentally a 20 something dude that has atleast some relation with the bad side of the world or used to be millitary. Either way, you can't just do everything in your power as an author to get him together with a 9 year old. It is disgusting and its just wrong.Then the character goes the "oh I lived in the 20th century so kissing isnt wrong" train of thought. Bro you made out with a 9 year old and the mcs brother is constantly pushing them together. It's weird.At the pace the story is developing and with how the 'relationship' or whatever is developing I'll image they'll do the deed by 13 or some bullshit amd have it be explained by "mc is following medieval customs" or some bs.tl;dr good story but author is pushing the mc to be a pedo. And dont use the "mc is currently 10" argument. Body is 10 but his mind sure as shit aint. Wait until he is atleast 16 to do this shit, even then I'll personally find it weird but dont do it at 10 or 9. 16 is acceptable, preferably it should be 18 or 20 but I know you wont wait that long

none the less its something fun to read during break at work. Plus most decent works on this site are slowing down when it comes to uploads. Only true mistake on your part would be the name, it doesnt capture what the story is about. Name captures something akin to a bland harem power fantasy or some such, while your story is more in the lines of lord of mysteries in terms of story. Just thought you should know, you arent capturing your intended audience, only reason I found it was because it was in the recommended section of a chapter and I thought "why not?"

Don't worry about it, its a great setting with alot of potential.Shame I cant read all of it for free but I'll try to read as much as possible by unlocking chapters using ads daily

New phone, so sorry for the words that are messed up.Dunno if I can edit without deleting so I'll write this in order to clarify

As much as I love the world that the author has created I do have some issues woth the writting quality.At some point around after the main character left the mansion the quality of writting turned more or less to the quality of an mtl. I am saying this as the first few chapters were very will written in terms of quality. The author himself also stated there would be no face slapping young master moments and while it is a semi valid statement there are mentions of kowtowing aswell as a young master antagonisimg the mc.Story itself and the world building itself is fairly good. I love the mix of magic, 1600s type architecture and mixed technology from the late 1800s to early 1700s.Anyway, tl;dr all in all. Good setting, similar to LoM in some ways, system and from what I know there will be players later. Bad parts are the grammar, wording in some parts, gender getting confused and things like characters knowning about kowtowing in a medieval european type setting that isn't earth.