Webnovel Author: Alisa_Vitarda - Novel Collection

after reading 10 chapters of your book. as a writer it's good, the plot is also good except for the beast in chapters 2/3 he fights the beast but the description of the beast is not clear. what kind of animal was it, was it four-legged or not, did it look like a dinosaur or some fictitious kind like a chimera? because there was a battle scene I found it hard to imagine the battle because I didn't know what kind of beast it was. other than that, the rest of the story is good, the way description of the characters and the event is also good

apart from chapter one where I felt weird reading because it takes a full chapter only for the MC to die, everything is good, and the story description is clear. As a reader myself, I saw in the early chapters that the story is truly an isekai classic, where multiple otherworlders are summoned in one room by a kingdom that is even suspicious and suddenly ordered to kill the demon king. Also, as a military man who often sees his friends die, I think the MC's personality is a bit timid, but that's probably just my gut feeling

ya hallo! I know I'm shamelessly reviewing my own story. however, since I always re-read it almost every time during a new chapter update, I think I have the right to judge my own work. hmm...awesome is the only thing I can say. At first, I got a lot of input in terms of grammar and others, and even though it's not perfect now, I think it's getting better. while for story development, character background, and world background? of course, since I wrote it, it's *5