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damn bro there a google clan too?
The only way to avoid detection as a fox spirit is to take the body of a human. This fight left the firefox clan almost extinct and weak, so Sol didn't think they would dare be so bold to do this, especially with him as their new leader and Natasha who has gone back to keep them in check.
Sol Alpha
Fantasy · 3rd_Sin
ok
"Who the hell does he think he is?" Satori raged but no one else spoke. They just looked in the direction of the stairs in silence.
Sol Alpha
Fantasy · 3rd_Sin
who tf is satori? was he one of the ones from the orc fight?
"Who the hell does he think he is?" Satori raged but no one else spoke. They just looked in the direction of the stairs in silence.
Sol Alpha
Fantasy · 3rd_Sin
indifferent
The doors swung open as Sol walked in. His eyes seemed indifferent as he looked towards the distance with an indifferent room. In the grand Hall, Sol could see the other heirs and he smiled cruelly.
Sol Alpha
Fantasy · 3rd_Sin
thres no "?" there. also symphaty much?
"Should you question me again? The sixth tribe will seize to have a Ƙhai'k" Sol said as he slowly turned to meet the gaze of the old man.
Sol Alpha
Fantasy · 3rd_Sin
wasnt she 3 tailed? or am i remembering the names wrong
By his right was the Ƙahi'k of the sixth tribe and by his left was Natasha, a five-tailed fox spirit!
Sol Alpha
Fantasy · 3rd_Sin
u kinda jumbled up this sentence here.
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Sol Alpha
Fantasy · 3rd_Sin
whats that last sentence here. im not sure what u wanted to say with the latter half
An aloof voice rang as a belong hair kid in orange robes walked forward. Ahead of him was the mighty northern gate but right in front of the northern gates were numerous unconscious fox spirits. The burden was too much a secret another part of the person fell.
Sol Alpha
Fantasy · 3rd_Sin
ah ok
Sol exhaled and his eyes flashed with cruel lights. He picked the northern gate because it was the farthest from their location. Before he gets there, the others must have started their battles, killing many fox spirits and weakening the ones he will fight. Since he is alone, he won't need to share experience points with anyone.
Sol Alpha
Fantasy · 3rd_Sin
so others get experience too? since when. do they have systens too. if not why do they get exp too? be carefull with what you say. i told u to take ur time with these and u release 2 chapters in like 3 days?
Sol exhaled and his eyes flashed with cruel lights. He picked the northern gate because it was the farthest from their location. Before he gets there, the others must have started their battles, killing many fox spirits and weakening the ones he will fight. Since he is alone, he won't need to share experience points with anyone.
Sol Alpha
Fantasy · 3rd_Sin
u kinda streching logic here. just say the barrier requires the outside foxes to be alive
The curse barrier has too many flaws that can be taken advantage of. While it strengthens the fox Queen, it also weakens the people maintaining it in order to keep the queen at her peak. The more fox spirits killed the more burden will be placed on the living ones. This will continue until they cannot maintain the current level of fox queen and her strength will plummet, suffering from a backlash as well.
Sol Alpha
Fantasy · 3rd_Sin
WOOOW. MAD villian vibes here. maybe tone down the narcisism? he has not been repremanded for any of his actions. and also like i said before theres too little down time between fights. Just do a couple chill chapters after this fight. basicly slice of life
"A God needs no army, a god is the embodiment of perfection. I am God" Sol laughed madly as he climbed his horse and urged it to go forward.
Sol Alpha
Fantasy · 3rd_Sin
ok but like....why is this only happening now. whats the POV of the foxes. you focus too much on Sol and forget the oyher characters. Look if you want my recomandation id say just do a B plot. if you do not know what that is message me on discord and ill explain
Powerful shockwaves erupted across the world as everything trembled under the furious beast. While everyone was deadly pale and terrified, Sol was amused. What he saw was a big bag of experience points standing ahead of him!
Sol Alpha
Fantasy · 3rd_Sin
were stunned*
Seeing Sol Cecile, Theresa, Ranga, and Satori was stunned. The Sol they saw now, was far different from the person the last time. Back then it was as if he had no aura and when using his bloodline power it felt like his power had exploded but now his aura was fierce and mighty yet it was restrained.
Sol Alpha
Fantasy · 3rd_Sin
alright cool but do try to keep this consistent and avoid retconning things like this
[A/N: So I decided to change the names of his bloodline modes from Bloodline Cerberus to Bloodline Hellhound (+3 to all stats) and Bloodline: Hellfire to Bloodline Cerberus (+10 to all stats). I did this because the Cerberus bloodline should be the name of his ultimate form. Sorry for the inconvenience!]
Sol Alpha
Fantasy · 3rd_Sin
All.The leaders. this is why i told you to read these over
Strong wind poured into the room as the seat where the sixth tribe Ƙahi'k is seated. All. The leaders and tribe chieftains turned toward the massive round table and frowned.
Sol Alpha
Fantasy · 3rd_Sin
ok this is cool and all but maybe describe how the chieftans actually look
ch 26 Rebirth of a cheiftain
Sol Alpha
Fantasy · 3rd_Sin
you dont use btw here as youre not actually talking to the reader. if you just remove that it should be good
Right now, all he could do is let things happen as they should. When the time comes they will deal with it. By the way, even if the enemy is that strong he doubted they will be able to win against the current leaders of the four families who reside here in the center.
Sol Alpha
Fantasy · 3rd_Sin