Webnovel Author: Starlessii - Fanfic Collection

Until now I have two comments on your novel, the first is the time of Kushina's advent, it is the end of the second war, and the other thing is about opening the gate of the heart, with all due respect to you, I find the idea illogical because the heart is responsible for vitality and pumps blood. If he uses the original technique, when he opens the first gate or another, vitality will decrease and the body will be exhausted, but it will return to normal later thanks to the heart that pumps vitality. But if you So far I have two observations on your novel. The first time of Kushina's arrival is the end of the second war, and the other thing is about opening the gate of the heart. With all due respect to you, I find the idea illogical because the heart is responsible for vitality and pumps blood. If it uses the original technique, when it opens the first gate or another, vitality will decrease, and the body will be exhausted, but it will return to normal later thanks to the heart that pumps vitality. But if you reverse So far I have two observations on your novel. The first is the time of Kushina's advent, it is the end of the second war, and the other thing is about opening the gate of the heart. With all due respect to you, I find the idea illogical because the heart is responsible for vitality and pumps blood. If it uses the original technique, when it opens the first gate or otherwise, vitality will decrease and the body will be exhausted, but it will return to normal later thanks to the heart that pumps vitality. But if you reverse this thingSo far I have two comments on your novel. The first time of Kushina's coming is the end of the second war, and the other thing is about opening the gate of the heart. With all due respect to you, I find the idea illogical because the heart is responsible for vitality and pumps blood. If it uses the original technique, when it opens the first gate or otherwise, vitality will decrease, exhausting the body, but it will return to normal later thanks to the heart that pumps vitality. But if you reverse this thing,So far I have two comments on your novel. The first time of Kushina's coming is the end of the second war, and the other thing is about opening the gate of the heart. With all due respect to you, I find the idea illogical because the heart is responsible for vitality and pumps blood. If it uses the original technique, when it opens the first gate or otherwise, vitality will decrease, exhausting the body, but it will return to normal later thanks to the heart that pumps vitality. But if you reverse this thing, So far I have two observations on your novel. The first is the time of Kushina's coming, it is the end of the second war, and the other thing is about opening the gate of the heart. With all due respect to you, I find the idea illogical because the heart is responsible for vitality and pumps blood. If he uses the original technique, when he opens the first gate or another, vitality will decrease, and the body will be exhausted, but it will return to normal later thanks to the heart that pumps vitality. But if you reverse this thing toSo far I have two comments on your novel. The first is the time of Kushina's advent is the end of the second war. The other thing is about opening the gate of the heart. With all due respect to you, I find the idea illogical because the heart is responsible for vitality and pumps blood. If it uses the original technique, when it opens the first gate or another, vitality will decrease, exhausting the body, but it will return to normal later thanks to the heart that pumps vitality. But if you reverse this thing, there is no So far I have two comments on your novel. The first is the time of Kushina's advent is the end of the second war. The other thing is about opening the gate of the heart. With all due respect to you, I find the idea illogical because the heart is responsible for vitality and pumps blood. If it uses the original technique, when it

The timing is almost correct because if you remember that the time of Rin and Obito died was the end of the third war and Minato was then the Hokage became but it is supposed that Kushina came at the end of the second war and not a few years before

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I found it, and in my opinion it's a mistake from the writer. As for your statement about being part of spiritual power or something like that, it doesn't make sense because Kakashi succeeded in using Susanu and he's not from Uchiha, and it's also known that susano causes eye pressure and strain, as we've seen in some fights, so maybe Madhara used a secret technique or something similar to transfer the power of his original eye to him or stored it.

I searched and I didn't find anything like this there just that he used Susano and he is in the case of Eddo Tensi and this is another different topic

Susano takes power from the eye negatively for Shisui he used it with one eye and in this case the pressure will be double on his eye and for the fourth ninja war you might mean Kakashi and he is like Shisui but I am not convinced of his ability to activate Susano because he is not from Uchiha

Who is he?

Mmm his eye is still injured and has not healed completely it needs about two years to heal so in normal days he closes his right eye and in confrontations he uses it although it causes slight pain but there is no problem in using it provided that he does not overuse the skills that his right eye needs And if you mean by your talk about Susano, yes, it causes blindness, but not directly. Itachi previously used his eye a lot and for a few years until it weakened, but Sasuke caused his blindness earlier because he used it excessively. That's why MC doesn't use it, whether for training or otherwise, because it has great damage to his right eye, which is still injured.

Why?

I'm not very bad at English, I can talk a little, but usually that mistake doesn't happen. In general, I've corrected it, and in the future I try to pay attention. Thank you

I corrected the errors of the pronoun "she" and I don't think there's another mistake related to it. I promise you in the future that I will take care of pronouns

I really apologize I did not pay attention to the pronouns because my mother tongue does not need to specify the gender of the person when talking as you can understand this from the context of speech but English must specify that so when I type my language the translator automatically puts she, i or he

I also feel confused, I don't know where the mistake is, when you use the translation for my language, the reading is understandable, but in English it is not readable

😢😢😢 The translation or the story??

Can you tell me the error where I tried to fix the translation and removed some errors but it seems that it is not enough