Webnovel Author: RyujiSakamata - Novel Collection

It feels like I've been reading a fresh-out Western book from the bookstore. The details of the world and the character are completely detailed, accompanied with flowery words. As per experience in this platform, readers including I had a hard time reading long paragraphs. Overall, the quality has a great potential and is recommended for Western story lovers.

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Honest Review: I hope that the writing gets edited so that I could change my review. I encountered problems mostly regarding on the worldbuilding. The lack of descriptions made it out of place for the characters. I'm sad to say that while the characters are talking, I couldn't picture the scene at all. Also, random things are suddenly inserted in the scene, like when I'm set in thinking that the male character stands up but there's suddenly an apple and a chair where he sits. About the characters, same thing as the things, they're suddenly inserted into scenes without introductions. A name suddenly pops up, and I, the reader, wasted time figuring out who he was. On the dialogues, I can tell that it moves the plot. On the other hand, pronouns are scattered, leaving confusion on who is talking. Some dialogues also have missing tags, amplifying the same issue. A famous FL author here in WN once told me that vivid descriptions are what makes a FL story running, which is why you should focus on giving sense of simulation and entertainment for the readers. Other than that, I hope that I can see the re-edits and further dive into the story. Ngl, you did a great job in writing this story, fellow author!